Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Horror Anti-Hero Lead Low Fantasy Magic Ruling Class Strategy Supernatural
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 One day it is beautiful. My mom is not busy with back to back shifts. My sister got excellent grades on her test, and I have some money in my pocket. The next, however, a cult traps my sister and the rest of her school on campus, the dead won't stay dead at the hospital my mother works at, and monsters of different sizes and deformities pour into the streets eager to decorate it with human entrails.

 

And that's not the half of it.

 

 

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Ezra Irehearth

Ezra Irehearth

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Good Story, needs some work

It is an interesting enough story, better than most of the stuff one finds here.

The constant changes in character perspectives can be somewhat confusing though. Another thing that also bothers me is a seemingly lack of depth? I don't know exactly how to explain it but behind every character there is a background that we as readers are unfamiliar with, so you know that they have more than what you are seeing, but we don't know what. I think that longer chapters with more time with each charater would be very beneficial for this story. Afterall there are characters being introduced left and right, but we don't spend enough time with them to get to know them.