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An AI calling itself Schema has assimilated earth into its system. As a consequence, everyone gained access to status screens, power-ups, and skills. This AI turned these concepts from fiction to fact. It's easy to become intoxicated with leveling up and becoming stronger. To some, it's too good to be true like living out a dream.
For Daniel, however, it's closer to a nightmare.
He's in a bit of a predicament. Cracks in our dimensional fabric have unleashed terrifying beasts from dark, abyssal places. Schema organizes these cracks into dungeons, giving the native species of the planet a chance to fight back. Daniel finds himself trapped in one of these dungeons. Not long after, he discovers there's only one way out.
Kill or be killed.
(Note: I am currently editing the story and I'm uploading those edits. It will take time to do this, so if you find a huge shift in the story's formatting, that's why. I'm steadily hammering away at it, but it's going to take time. Thanks for your understanding, if you're offering it.)
This is a lit-RPG inspired by the Fallout series of games and the Legend of Randidly Ghosthound.
Schedule: 2-3 releases a week of around 3,000 words.
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The main thing to note is; when you finally get past the beginning, you'll wish you read it more seriously. Then you'll appreciate the story anyways one you get deeper. Ps you should realize there are 3k words, so trug along or wimp it out, if you have something better to do why are you here?
The story is beyond solid, if you can find flaws you won't care later because you'll already be loving the direction this story takes (Tank then a stronger tank). Compared to others were a story goes flat and or diviates from its orgins, this one becomes round while building off the solid foundation into something you'll end up paying for.
This is a story with lots of chapters published and many more to come.
So, before starting to read it, it's important to know if you'll like it. Give it a try, and if you like the first plot of this story, you'll probably keep reading until the end.
The world is built around stats, levels, and most of the common RPG-esque stuff. So the story is built around how the MC survives and levels up while the world goes crazy. There are plenty of novels around using similar stuff, and as commonly seen the MC gets quite OP. But at least in this one, the author lets you feel he's not perfect, the MC can fail, and he'll need lots of help to advance in his journey.
The characters are well done, no one is perfect and everyone has faults. But the most important part is that the author uses these to build the story. So if a character is not good at something, it's not just useless info, and if they fight or whatever you'll see characters failing to accomplish deeds if they are not good with them.
In general is a well-rounded story, that even after more than 200 chapters doesn't get boring and keeps you interested. The enemies get not only bigger as the MC gets stronger, but also get clever, and sometimes he's just an ant stuck in something much bigger.
It's also easy to read, you'll find few typos and the author doesn't keeps its terminology simple most of the time.
Give it a try as it's a good story worth the time.
Overallscore/ TLTR: 5/5
If you enjoy darker themed fantasy this is a must read. This story offers an intersting mc in a dark world with interesting and humorfull conversations. I think its biggest selling point is its style which transmitts the theme really well. Absolutly one of my favourite stories.
The auther makes great use of skill descriptions, thoughts, and dialouges to transmit an epic, dark feeling. There still are funny/ humerous moments, but they dont disturb the setting. The wording and focus is, imo, perfect for this story and its theme. e.g:
especially the desciptions of the determinator and figther tree:
"Those that are determined do not stop. They do not relent. They do not yield"
"Nothing can stop you. They tear your legs off, you walk with your arms...They tear off your arms, you crawl with your chin...They tear off your chin, you crawl with your tongue...They tear off your tongue, you crawl with your teeth. You are a walking, breathing storm"
"To be determined is to be definite. Define yourself. Give your unstoppable will a purpose, and let it go and crush that which stands in its way. "
"There is no stopping the Determinator. They do not understand facts, besides their own. They are resolute in their faith. They worship their own wills."
"So fight on in your life. Find meaning in war. Find fulfillment in bloodshed. Become the fight...There's so little left in these corpses you stand on. You've built bridges of bodies and swam in oceans of blood...For you are war incarnate, a monster in a man's flesh. Swallow the darkness, and be swallowed by it"
As english is not my motherlanguage I might not be the best person to judge but I have not noticed a single mistake or stumbled upon a sentence i had problems understanding/following.
Story Score: 5/5
Whie the author admits that he was inspired by "Legend of Randidly Ghosthound" I do not think/feel that "the new World" is a copy or close. I love both stories and think that besides their start premises they are completly different. The story follows a single protagonist(at least thus far) and his development( physically, mentally, and socially) in a huge, dark world while becoming interesting for way more powerfull creatures quickly.
Charakter score: 4.5/5
I think that the charakters are well written, different from each other and standard characters, and interacting on different ways, but always interesting and often quite funny. I personally am glad that the author included humer via dialouges and not through setting or ridiculous characters, which migth conflict with the dark setting.
I substracted half a star because I think there is still development with both the quantity and quality( in a sense of why they are who they are and behave the way they do) of the characters. However I might (probably will) add that star in the future, as the author is already introducing new characters, and giving more details to the characters surrounding the mc. It should also be noted that the story is quite young so my critigue maay just vanaish in air with the coming chapters.
Yo bro, I've been refreshing this page for almost a week now and I still havn't seen any new chapters! Whens the next update rolling around or is there a note I missed?
Great story btw.
I've read a lot of good stories on RR and got to say this is ranked in my top 10 so far
great story, badass mc and and realistic OPness
This is being written as of chapter 16. The character actually makes sense, his motivations are clear and he doesn't let things come between his goals.
Grammar is pretty good.
The story just makes you want more, which is very important for a book.
The style works. I can't really say anything aside from that.
I like the story idea and the writing style. Its just some minor grammar issues that make it hard to understand what your trying to say.
Other than that, the story is pretty good.
Some in depth explanation would be good for the story. Not asking for 5 paragraph explanations but try to cover all the important parts just to explain how things happened.
Right off the bat - if you're a battle junkie, you will love this story. The author has a mystical ability to turn each and every fight into a perfectly-choreographed maelstrom of epic that gets your blood pumping and your heat beating each and every time. I'm still trying to decipher this masterwork of action prose.
And it doesn't stop there! The fights tie beautifully with the leveling system, making for satisfying, believable, and well-paced upgrades.
I used to be a patron of this story, though stopped because of life interfering with my reading time. That, and past the yawm battle, I felt like there wasn't a whole lot to hook me apart from the fights, which, as marvelous as they are, did grow a touch repetitive.
Despite all of that, this story is easily a 5 star read. Thank you for sharing this gem with the world!
I appreciate being true to the proper context of your characters: a protagonist that is often terrified, driven to do the wrong thing at times, and who succeeds through struggling until things work, is one I'm fascinated by. The protagonist is continually shown to only be special in circumstance, and even then it's through others' manipulation. I appreciate that, and while there's some issues in the presentation, I am very much enjoying it.
I wasn't blown away at first by the premise, since the inspiration by the Ghosthound series was kind of thrown in my face. However, it has absolutely grown past that and has grown into a really interesting story very much focused on the broader scope of the universe, from a fun perspective.
Great story, love the plot and characters. The prose sucks, though. All the sentences are super short and clipped. It doesn't flow, and isn't fun to read. If this one aspect were fixed, this would definitely become one of my favorite stories ever. As it is, I've dropped it at chapter 114.