Original COMPLETED Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Virtual Reality

The Earth is changing. Aliens invaded, bringing with them social upheaval, advanced technology and an armada of peacekeeping robots. But Alan, a college student pursuing a now-useless degree, cares little about all of this. He has only one thing on his mind: the Game. A fully immersive virtual reality, the Game appears to be a major part of the invading civilization. And Alan can't wait to play. Soon though, he realizes the Game is anything but simple, and the stakes are higher than he ever imagined.


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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Start: Enter the Game ago
Tutorial? What Tutorial? ago
The Tutorial Starts! Or does it? ago
Is this the tutorial? ago
Tutorial, Start! ago
The First Step of Survival ago
Barely Surviving ago
The Key to Survival: Upgrades ago
Risk Management ago
Mistakes ago
Revelations ago
New Beginnings ago
Arc 2 Start! Back to Reality ago
The City ago
Finding the Undercity ago
The Labyrinth ago
Guild Assessments Day One ago
Basic Combat Assessment ago
A Surprising Assessment ago
Final Assessment? ago
Old Hangouts ago
Progress ago
Moving 3.1 ago
Introductions 3.2 ago
Running in Circles 3.3 ago
Not a Chapter (Hiatus) ago
Hacking? 3.4 ago
New Challenges 3.5 ago
News 3.6 ago
The Gam3: Opening Moves Official Release! ago
A Hacking Good Time 3.7 ago
Announcing thegam3.com! New chapter can be found there. ago
The Academy 3.8 ago
The Academy 3.9 ago
The Academy 3.10 ago
The Academy 3.11 ago
The Academy 3.12 ago
The Academy 3.13 ago
The War 4.1 ago
The War 4.2 ago
The War 4.3 ago
The War 4.4 ago
The War 4.5 ago
The War 4.6 ago
The War 4.7 ago
The War 4.8 ago
The War 4.9 ago
The War 4.10 ago
The War 4.11 ago
The Abyss 5.1 ago
The Abyss 5.2 ago
The Abyss 5.3 ago
The Abyss 5.4 ago
The Abyss 5.5 ago
The Abyss 5.6 ago
The Abyss 5.7 ago
The Abyss 5.8 ago
The Abyss 5.9 ago
The Abyss 5.10 ago
The Abyss 5.11 and Earth’s Gambit Release! ago
The Abyss 5.12 ago
The Abyss 5.13 ago
The Abyss 5.14 ago
The Empire 6.1 ago
The Empire 6.2 ago
The Empire 6.3 ago
The Empire 6.4 ago
The Empire 6.5 ago
The Empire 6.6 ago
The Empire 6.7 ago
The Empire 6.8 ago
The Empire 6.9 ago
The Empire 6.10 ago
The Empire 6.11 ago
The Empire 6.12 ago
Epilogue ago
Sacrificial Pieces is now out on Amazon! ago

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A quickly collapsing star

I’m rating through the lens of an actual book and not with the bloated ratings that is pervasive here on RRL. If I were to give it a bloated rating I’d give it a 4.5/5 stars.

TL;DR: The rundown of this review is that this story is a really big disappointment. It started off like a beacon, lighting up like a refuge from the mass of unpolished works on RRl. But, as the story progresses the small scratches on its story quickly formed into cracks and ultimately broke it to its current state.

The style of the author’s writing doesn’t really stand out. There are a few things that show signs of amateurism, but they are dismissible. The main takeaways are that the dialogs aren’t the most natural sounding but the prose works fine to advance the story and still make it engaging. It is in no way indication that the style is great but that it is passible.

Much in the same vein as style, the grammar is good. There are little to no grammatical errors that stood out to me. I’m sure that there were a few but nothing worth mentioning as a major detraction.

The premise of a universe connecting VR game had great potential and I was really into it but the execution didn’t meet my expectation. That said the story started off very engrossing. Learning about how the Aliens’ presence affected Earth was a good start to showcase how different it is from our own lives. Even the geopolitical climate of the story was interesting but then we start seeing that it isn’t as deep as portrayed and is only a shallow pool that only wets our feet. The manipulation of the various factions to control Earth did a good job to portraying the nature of politics; where each side is playing at their own games for their own gains persuading the naïve with a facade of generosity. Alan, the MC, is a good stand in for us because as a new person on the scene we know not enough to distinguish the truth from the lies and when hard decisions need to be made it’s hard to trust even our own judgment. But all of that gets thrown out of the window as things starts getting more complex that even the author doesn’t even know what’s going on anymore. Furthermore Alan never has a concrete goal. A lot of things are hinted at like, saving the earth from alien political takeover, or becoming the best in his guild, or discovering the truth to The Game, but little to no progress is made and the reader is left in a state of wanting, confusion, and disappointment when little is resolved. Then it gets even worst when Alan somehow obtains game breaking skills that are poorly explained, using visual analogies as truths, and turning to mysticism for exploration which baffles me greatly considering the setup of the universe the story is taking place in. Lastly, I was fully expecting a good sci-fi world but instead I got your typical fantasy with a sci-fi cover. Your typical elves and other races are present with some make up but they are essentially the same.

The aspect that needed the most work has always been the characters. Alan, the MC has always been a bit lack luster and plain, working quite well for the readers to self-insert. Taking the criticism the author tries to start building him up with goals and exploring his past but it all comes off as cringy and pathetic on Alan’s part. It was too little too late in that these issues should have propped up earlier and now they just feel shoehorned in.

The side characters are also unimpressive bordering on clichés. Having one of the first female characters that Alan significantly interact with be a Japanese girl who uses a katana made me want to face palm and I contemplated stopping right there. It is essentially these small issues that build up over time that detracts from the rest of the narrative. Other characters don’t really have their own voices. Nobody seems to have any real presence and that can be seen as a lack of experience on the author’s part.

It’s a good world. How I see it is that it is very much like Harry Potter in that the world gives people a lot of work with. The Game is interesting in its own right and a full exploration of it could be quite fun. It is unlike Harry Potter in that good characters are absent and all that we see is the MC fumbling around, which is fine for a start but when it continues it becomes a drag.

I have high hopes for this author but I’d advise him to do a bit more planning next time so he isn’t stretched for ideas.

arswyd
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This is the best this site has to offer

I really love this.

Considering most of the typical VRMMO novels are awfully similar I really appreciate what the author has done here. Especially the interactions between Alan and Eve are very entertaining and realistic (although I wouldn’t know better, I don’t write myself after all).

I really just hope the author gets to releasing new chapters on closer intervals – the story just has me hooked at the screen everyday, waiting for more. Keep up the great work.

Didiodo
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Best Sci-fy fic here, and my favourite story. If you're a fan of Universe Online or Nebula, this is for you!

Hope this story continues for a long, long time.

KuroShiro
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Really Enjoying It!

Great Story loving it so far!

The characters are not simply there each has a purpose as simple as that may sound most fail at this.

And personally I love the concept, as unlikely as it is it still sounds more plausible than some genius inventing Virtual Reality all of a sudden

Ravenstorm
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One of the best stories I have read here.  Thanks for all the hard work.  

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Good balanced by the bad

I have several serious issues with The Gam3 (which comprise the majority of this review, below), but despite all  of that, I enjoyed the story and I'll keep on reading it. The positives are many: the world building is good, the setting is interesting, I like how the character progression has been, the actions scenes are mostly engaging and not-overlong, and even though the plot has only recently started to move forward, the story still feels like its moving along. It's clear the author has a good imagination and good follow-through on his ideas, which gives him a leg up on 95% of the hacks on this site(including myself, *cough cough*). His problem is with his characters. 

 

 

The protagonist, Alan, has very little personality or backstory or motivation behind his actions. After 45 chapters the author is only now beginning to establish the smallest semblance of a character arc for him. That can be fine; sometimes it takes a long time to build up a character, to get to the appropriate climax through which he'll start to grow.  However, so far Alan is pretty much literally a sock puppet for his AI,  doing and saying exactly it says with very rare exceptions. His experience in the game so far can be equated to a child tracing over a picture, and everyone around him calls him a great artist. Very rarely do we see Alan achieve something through his own efforts, to overcome an obstacle by strength of his own character, to jump without looking, to get out of his comfort zone, or any of that good stuff.

 

Again, that can be fine. There's no such thing as cheating at life, not really, and The Game is a simulated universe that's supplanted the real world in importance. I get that. Also, I understand that the author may be setting up a plot twist of some sort, that its possible we're not even past the first act in an epically long story, or something else along those lines. All that doesn't matter because this is, ultimately, a story about a game , and nothing will lessen how very unsatisfying it is to read about a drone cheating his way victory. I mean that literally: most of the ways the AI helps him can be found in multiplayer cheats for existing FPS, RTS and MOBA  games. And if all that wasn't bad enough, the key to every single achievement that can't directly attributed to his AI holding his hand are because of advantages given to him directly BY THE FREAKING GAME ADMINISTRATORS(the shittiest type of cheating, lmao).

 

...It's almost enough to think the author is doing it on purpose, tongue in cheek. 

Princess Boo
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Really good story with room to improve.

The Gam3 it is a really good story, one of the few that has managed to get me to log in every day to see if it's been updated. A good base, a well thought concept and, by the moment, an incredibly original story in a site where that's not very common (not that that is bad). It has the perfect dose of mystery, enough that the story is interesting and worth reading but not enough to make it incomprehensible; it also has a great MC, with weaknesses that make the reader identify themselves with him but with a growth speed that allows the reader to glimpse the heights at which the MC  could arrive, if not for the problem that he relays to much on the AI, it's basically Eve who does all the work and Adam is a mere puppet. I hope that seeing how helpless he his without her on chapter 19 makes him  realize the need to start being able to function on a certain level without Eve. But do not worry, the story is still on the early stages and can be fixed, as I've said, it has room to improve, to evolve.

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AMAZING!! but it could be much better....

Honestly love the novel and cant stop, but I can't help but be seriously disappointed in the MC design, and in my opinion doesnt suit the type of story i feel like you are going for, he's a major pussy and i cant help but get pissed at him because it ruines the mood of the story.

The MC is literally a piece of shit that just relies on his AI to do everything and you know what he does with an OP AI? he fucking complaines about studying and doing work when it tries to help him, and you know what his fucking goal is?? to save his planet by being a fucking piece of shit pussy that sits on his ass without trying to do it while bassically letting his AI play for him and being useless bagage for it to carry. its just so frusrating to read a really good storyline with some useless shit as the mc

I'd rather have a cold MC for this type of story with war and him being an outcast of sorts with his girlfriend dying in a car crash, it makes more sense then some shy ass retard that is fucking useless and doesnt try to change it.

Another thing that bothers me is his constantly changing weapons, i get he is meant to be a jack of all trades but this is really unnecessary, just have him stick with dual wielding a sword and pistol with sheaths on his waist and a sniper rifle on his back. Also the AI is basically DOING and not HELPING which pretty much adds onto the reason the MC feels like some useless shit besides the fact he complains about everything, the AI should just help with detection and helping him train in his class and weapons while providing info of things when he needs it. When he gets his second AI should be when he gets into hacking more and like how its doing right now,(without him using his talent for hackig when he does basically nothing when hacking)do all the hacking for him while he does everything on the combat side of things

LONG STORY SHORT
things that can made the MC and story better:
1. cold/outcast Type of MC
2.dual wield a pistol and sword with a sniper rifle on his back(or something close)
3.Make the MC train according to what the AI(eve) found was the best and effective methods for his weapons and also to learn the skills of other classes
4.Make the AI(eve and any other AI in fact) not able to show step by step what to do in combat like how it is now, do it so they can only help with detection(of enemies and weakpoints) and assistance in shooting(and slowing down time in this case with eve's special ability)by show the distance,wind,when the bullet drops and other things like that. Also have the AI's be info providers so he doesnt need to study everything and only the basics.
5. Have the second AI(?lampba?)do all the hacking stuff cause as of right now all he is doing is learning the skill and building things so the AI can do everything else.

think thats everything? maybe a little romance would be nice but i dont see anything besides his AI getting togeather with the current MC

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I love everything in this story but the Main Character, I repeat I detest the protagonist. The author made the densest motherfucker the lead character in his novel. The world building is 4 stars, character development at least a 3 star, the protagonist is written well, but I still irrevocably hate him. Naive and foolish, and never learns. Because of this, the plot moves at an inch crawl. And our Protagonist never makes an improvement, getting by merely on stats improving. Making combat and training arcs redundant. Overall, its a good read, but not satisfying.

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Among the VRMMO stories I've read, this one is probably the most original as far as the universe goes.

 

Instead of the traditional fantasy setting, we have a mostly SF world with aliens, computers, robots, plasma rifles, power armor and so on, but magic of sorts is also introduced as psionic abilities.

 

One of the major achievements from the author is managing to keep the whole thing coherent and the quality consistent. The universe is explained fluidly as the MC gets crash courses from his AI and at no point I had to suspend disbelief, which is rare. Even seemingly fortuitous events can be seen in a new light as the MC gets more info later on.

 

I really like the MC's progression so far, he felt very weak in the beginning compared to some other characters that are introduced, but his power-ups are really cool and flow well with the story.

 

The quality of writing is top notch as far as I'm concerned, I've read much worse printed books, it's quite pleasant.

 

Among the weak points, I would say that the group of side characters introduced early on felt a bit patched-on, it's a bit curious how they are able to perform so well and know so much when no-one is supposed to learn anything about the game before the Tutorial and they have no AI to explain the game to them unlike the MC. Then again, we don't see too much of them so it's ok.

 

I'm really looking forward to reading more.