The Gam3

This is a well written story.  The grammar is good and it seems very well put together.  I expect great things for this story.  I bet it hits the top 50 before the next 10 chapters come out.

Really interesting premise, with the right mix of classic ideas and new themes.

Definitely a must read for any sci-fi fan

The Gam3 is currently the best sci-fi on this site.

The universe  described in the story is truly unique and has a lot of potential. 

This is a very imaginative story.  It has an enjoyable storyline with realistic characters.  The world building is wonderful and very vivid.  I am really looking forward to more.  The way the story is set up leaves so many options.  It is absolutely massive with limitless potential.  It wonderfully blends magic, scifi, VRMMO, aliens, and more!  This story is among the top on this site and one of the top 2 scifis.  

I am so happy that there are increasingly higher quality stories with original and diverse backgrounds.  With the way things are going, the potential is very high.

The story and universe are incredibly well built. It draws you in and makes you believe that it's all real. However even for how good it is the MC is this stories weakest link. He is supposedly some kind of epic gamer in his past yet in the story he is virtually useless. He cant make his own decisions or even really think for himself. He constantly hesitates and says or does the most idiotic things possible. He wastes an unbelievable amount of time contemplating things as if the enemy will wait for him to finish his thoughts. By all evidence the real main character should almost be EVE since she is the one actually playing the game well, making smart choices, and taking action with Alan just there as her body. I'm surprised people haven't just taken her away from him cause she is, in all likely hood, more useful. Lastly though is the pointlessness of the characters class skills. He has specialized himself towards being a sniper yet only once in the story does he actually USE a sniper rifle or even do what a sniper is supposed to. So far the entire story has been about him and two pistols in  close combat, this begs the question of why have him have any sniper skills at all. Even the author keeps bringing up that he is a sniper yet they have done absolutely nothing with this information whatsoever.

So overall the story is everything you could hope it to be but the MC's apparent sniper build going to complete waste and his lack of any real form of common sense along with his reliance upon his AI really drags the story down. 

Review from the first chapter of Arc 2) You have a really good story here. It has a lot of potential. Your grammar in general is quite good too. The story is fluid, there’s no big hole and there’s no discrepancy so far. The way you built the weapon and character system is great.

A slow story and a slow plot development is okay, after all your chapters are a bit short so you don’t have that many words written yet. I can’t wait for the next chapter

Now for the less great: I find your MC and other characters a bit lacking. Okay he can be following is AI all you want, but i’d like to see more of is personality and emotions. For exemple, one of is tutorial mate says something along the line of ”your AI nany” and you say its stuck the MC because it was a bit true, but you dont develop from there. It was somewhat an action part with the tutorial going but…Apart from is name and some basics, we don’t know anything about your MC after one arc.

Also, the effect Game -> Real is not really there, but for this I hope it’s just a ‘For now’ since the first arc was about the Tutorial. For exemple, personnally i’d like to know if Eve was stored in the capsule or if she’s still in the computer assembly, if merging with Titan have changed something else than just her database, if she’ll need a bigger assy to store all that new data, will she evolve to the next class (what are the prerequisite of that btw? one of the permanent goal of an AI would be to grow after all?), what the company staff think about Icewolf bringing a new guy in. His family, is he an only child?

And your MC appear a bit OP, maybe put some big class weaknesses to compensate?

Anyway, so far, good work, and dont drop that project! It is really a gold mine what you built, and if you can work the weakpoints it’s gonna be really a great story. Oh and i must say, your character appear a bit weak in part because of the AI, some stories have equally shallow MC but it’s less glaring sadly. Your concept is a bit working against you here, but if you work that weakness, it could become one of your strong point too.

Update at 5th chapter of the second arc.
You’re quite good with cliffhanger. You put ones good enough to make us eager for the next chapter but it isn’t a cliffhanger so big and glaring that it become annoying for the reader, gratz! Apart from that, the story development is flowing naturally, it doesn’t seem forced. The weaknesses your MC showed in the last chapter are especially appreciated, because there was a real need to compensate your MC OPness. The boon of the class he got should always be compensated to a certain degree to keep the feeling that the MC is “real”. Your character development is still lacking (in my opinion), but i see a little improvement here and there with the way he react to situations, for example. He really should show more emotions, think more thoughts. Your AI almost showed more emotion than your MC in the last part of the 5th chapter.

Later thought: I think i’ll do as one of the reviewer said. Think of Alan and Eve as one character. So that make the MC less shallow a bit maybe? Still love that story, read it 3 time so far. And i really liked the introduction speech from Elissandra. A very well written piece of text!

Other fics about VR usualy put ourselves into the future and how some genius made an AI or something like that and then the game was born, sometings arround those lines. Your idea is just veeery refreshing...

I find the MC very interesting, but then again, I put Alan and his AI in the same boat(as MC), (we just don't read about the AI thinking and stuff) so I find that it is pretty good. But otherwise (Alan) alone it isn't as interesting... he feels more likea pawn where the AI is the true player sometimes. About him growing too much I think that it is just a boost that he has to get in the beggining (bc of his AI). Also in the game there may be people level ?? so rushing to level 100 looks like is not a big of a deal, but we readers usually read about games where the MC gets to level 100 only after a lot of time, so maybe  you can make it more clear? (I don't know how to really but some people seem to be complaining).

Anyways, THANK YOU for this great fiction and for uploading it :D I got a few hours of fun reading it.

Great fiction! 

ps: My english skills are not very good so sorry for using much of the same words or anything of the sort.

This story is very good and very different from your normal VR-story. The setting, the world, the people  and how you play the game, everything is different from the norm - and I love it.

the story is sat in a form of futuristic style, where alien life is found and interacted with, and the game itself is important in this newly found intergalactic setting. In there, there are none of thatfantasy, middleaged setting but a sci-fi style with modern and  ingenious out ofspace styled weapons. 

The MC himslef seems to a total nutcase  and needs constant attention unless you want pure dissaster!

so this story is HIGHLY RECOMMENDED to read! (At least twice!)

-Dok

all Hail the Penguin Empire!

I Love this story, I just wish it was updated more

I quite enjoy your story,

The setting while VR, isn't at the same time, and the setting is unique in itself.

the character is also unseen from other stories out there.

I look forward to seeing how this all progresses.

Thank you!