The Gam3

This is a well written story.  The grammar is good and it seems very well put together.  I expect great things for this story.  I bet it hits the top 50 before the next 10 chapters come out.

Really interesting premise, with the right mix of classic ideas and new themes.

Definitely a must read for any sci-fi fan

This is a very imaginative story.  It has an enjoyable storyline with realistic characters.  The world building is wonderful and very vivid.  I am really looking forward to more.  The way the story is set up leaves so many options.  It is absolutely massive with limitless potential.  It wonderfully blends magic, scifi, VRMMO, aliens, and more!  This story is among the top on this site and one of the top 2 scifis.  

I am so happy that there are increasingly higher quality stories with original and diverse backgrounds.  With the way things are going, the potential is very high.

The Gam3 is currently the best sci-fi on this site.

The universe  described in the story is truly unique and has a lot of potential. 

Great story truly enjoyed it. Only thing I could want more is faster releases since I’m now addicted

This story is very good and very different from your normal VR-story. The setting, the world, the people  and how you play the game, everything is different from the norm - and I love it.

the story is sat in a form of futuristic style, where alien life is found and interacted with, and the game itself is important in this newly found intergalactic setting. In there, there are none of thatfantasy, middleaged setting but a sci-fi style with modern and  ingenious out ofspace styled weapons. 

The MC himslef seems to a total nutcase  and needs constant attention unless you want pure dissaster!

so this story is HIGHLY RECOMMENDED to read! (At least twice!)

-Dok

all Hail the Penguin Empire!

Review from the first chapter of Arc 2) You have a really good story here. It has a lot of potential. Your grammar in general is quite good too. The story is fluid, there’s no big hole and there’s no discrepancy so far. The way you built the weapon and character system is great.

A slow story and a slow plot development is okay, after all your chapters are a bit short so you don’t have that many words written yet. I can’t wait for the next chapter

Now for the less great: I find your MC and other characters a bit lacking. Okay he can be following is AI all you want, but i’d like to see more of is personality and emotions. For exemple, one of is tutorial mate says something along the line of ”your AI nany” and you say its stuck the MC because it was a bit true, but you dont develop from there. It was somewhat an action part with the tutorial going but…Apart from is name and some basics, we don’t know anything about your MC after one arc.

Also, the effect Game -> Real is not really there, but for this I hope it’s just a ‘For now’ since the first arc was about the Tutorial. For exemple, personnally i’d like to know if Eve was stored in the capsule or if she’s still in the computer assembly, if merging with Titan have changed something else than just her database, if she’ll need a bigger assy to store all that new data, will she evolve to the next class (what are the prerequisite of that btw? one of the permanent goal of an AI would be to grow after all?), what the company staff think about Icewolf bringing a new guy in. His family, is he an only child?

And your MC appear a bit OP, maybe put some big class weaknesses to compensate?

Anyway, so far, good work, and dont drop that project! It is really a gold mine what you built, and if you can work the weakpoints it’s gonna be really a great story. Oh and i must say, your character appear a bit weak in part because of the AI, some stories have equally shallow MC but it’s less glaring sadly. Your concept is a bit working against you here, but if you work that weakness, it could become one of your strong point too.

Update at 5th chapter of the second arc.
You’re quite good with cliffhanger. You put ones good enough to make us eager for the next chapter but it isn’t a cliffhanger so big and glaring that it become annoying for the reader, gratz! Apart from that, the story development is flowing naturally, it doesn’t seem forced. The weaknesses your MC showed in the last chapter are especially appreciated, because there was a real need to compensate your MC OPness. The boon of the class he got should always be compensated to a certain degree to keep the feeling that the MC is “real”. Your character development is still lacking (in my opinion), but i see a little improvement here and there with the way he react to situations, for example. He really should show more emotions, think more thoughts. Your AI almost showed more emotion than your MC in the last part of the 5th chapter.

Later thought: I think i’ll do as one of the reviewer said. Think of Alan and Eve as one character. So that make the MC less shallow a bit maybe? Still love that story, read it 3 time so far. And i really liked the introduction speech from Elissandra. A very well written piece of text!

Other fics about VR usualy put ourselves into the future and how some genius made an AI or something like that and then the game was born, sometings arround those lines. Your idea is just veeery refreshing...

I find the MC very interesting, but then again, I put Alan and his AI in the same boat(as MC), (we just don't read about the AI thinking and stuff) so I find that it is pretty good. But otherwise (Alan) alone it isn't as interesting... he feels more likea pawn where the AI is the true player sometimes. About him growing too much I think that it is just a boost that he has to get in the beggining (bc of his AI). Also in the game there may be people level ?? so rushing to level 100 looks like is not a big of a deal, but we readers usually read about games where the MC gets to level 100 only after a lot of time, so maybe  you can make it more clear? (I don't know how to really but some people seem to be complaining).

Anyways, THANK YOU for this great fiction and for uploading it :D I got a few hours of fun reading it.

Great fiction! 

ps: My english skills are not very good so sorry for using much of the same words or anything of the sort.

Style: is great.  It stays consistent and correct throughout.  The author fully imparts his tone, diction, etc. without issue.  It’s also told in 3rd person.

Story: is so far top notch.  It grabs your attention right away and keeps it.  While this is only 9 chapters in I can see the massive potential and the multitude of directions this story can take.  So far so good.

Grammar: No issues that I could see, which is a major plus.

Character: Unfortunately has some issues.  Specifically, the background of the character doesn’t match with his in game actions.  His background makes him highly intelligent but in game he acts incredibly stupid.  It’s a major disconnect.  However, given it’s just the start, the author has plenty of time to correct this resulting in a much better character (at least in my opinion).

Original at the point of blowing my mind in expectation of more. I just can’t wait to have more of a glimpse of this world the autor created… Fun fact, I’m considering to start a bit of  AI of my own…. I’m sure tho I will keep checking every day now and there if any new chapter is out.

Thanks for the amazing writing.