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An original story inspired by xianxia and western fantasy.
At sixteen years old, Nolan spent most of his time skipping class and playing video games, though he'd been getting into more fights lately than he cared to admit. His once record-high academics were nearing the end of a gradual decline, a byproduct of a growing indifference that had begun to fester after his parents' divorce. All of his worries dissipate like smoke in the wind when he inexplicably wakes up in another world, only to be replaced by a wider spectrum of vexing problems.
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This is an above average xianxia as it isn't written in the most simplistic of language like most are, the grammar is quite good, there are multiple perspectives as the story goes on and the protagonist is fairly sociable. Everything else seems mostly standard: zero to hero protagonist, "special" misleading MC cultivation level, cartoonishly evil opponents, magical problem solving trinket (grandpa ring) on steroids.
The only hope I can see for this story is if the “grandpa” is something more than the usual slavish support character. So far this hasn't been the case as he's taken control of the protagonist's body and piloted him out of danger once already.
My suggestion would be to adjust the power curve of the protagonist (it’s very fast despite his complaining) and the irrational murder hobo levels of the antagonists. As it stands I don’t see why Nolan, or anyone he brings with him, can’t just hide out and spend a few years inside his time dilation ring and come out gods. There are plot pressures that have dissuaded this so far but it seems like nothing would really prevent it.
At any rate Archaic Ring is quite readable but if you are well familiar with the genre then you’ll be bored at times.
This novel is excellent and I would recommend it to others. This has now become one of the novels I eagerly hit F5 on.
I'm not great at analyzing writing so take what I say as a grain of salt. The main supporting characters have a medium depth and backstory with even their own POV's which are still unfolding while the stepping stone villians still have enough of a backstory to not be one dimensional. I have read some really "high dollar" novels in the past where the authors spend so much time with the POV's and going into character depth that I lose track and interest in the story itself *cough* Game of Thrones *cough*. The author still has room to expand the universe and characters depth wise but it's nothing close to many of the chinese novels I've read where it's the classic, show up to an area, get defeated by a villian with a 1 paragraph backstory, spend 100 chapters getting stronger, come back and defeat the villian and move on to the next area.
Saw a bitter review and thought I'd show some support. To the author: your story is great man I just started reading xanxia/wuxia stories not long ago and thankfully found this series after binging most other ones on WW. Actually made an acc a while ago just to give you a rating.
It's a good change to read a xanxia that's so well written (seriously), though the cultivation system could use a bit more structure (I like it but I think it could be improved upon) and I'd like to hear more about the other people from Earth. It's been hinted at that people are collecting them and there's a lot that can be done with that idea. Not to say I'm mad that there aren't whole chapters full of explanations on the MCs cultivating, I never cared for any of that. The characters aren't out there killing the final boss every few chapters, there's good build up to the more dangerous/important fights and like someone said in another review the enemies are actually more than your usual xanxia name/face person where I actually like their pov. MCs decisions are believable, at least for me because I've seen violence before and the average person will freeze up or run away before risking their life, sorry but its true.
I hope this series is a long one and recommend it to anyone who enjoys wuxia/xanxia and wants to read one thats not lost in translation or just horribly written.
I truly believe this is one of the best stories on this site. You will not be able to find many others with such quality of world and writing, and definitely not in this genre. I will point out a lot of problems with the story, mostly to tell the author what I think. All of these make the story just a bit less than it could be, but do not impact the overall quality of it. So I recommend reading this nonetheless.
The grammar is very good, the writing flows and the only errors I had spotted did not hurt the flow of the story and usually amount to a repeated word or a missing space, which is better than on many stories I see reach the top list.
I put an emphasis on the quality of the world in this story, and it seems like something that people miss in their reviews. The author really tries to embody feelings with his description of scenery and while it doesn't always work at times I can still understand what feeling was supposed to embody that certain description. This makes the story a much more enjoyable read, as it does what many do not and tries to give us, the readers, a much better understanding of the current setting. This, however, can be a bit too much at times(for example the Palace of Greed chapter 1, the description at the beginning was a bit overwhelming, and lost me at some point.) but honestly, this is a good issue to have.
The characters and by virtue the plot as well are the weak point of this story, I must say. I feel that the main characters should be expanded upon, their wishes and goals because at the moment they are kind of aimlessly moving away from the conflict and to profits. This isn't to say they are not logical, this seems like the most logical thing to do, but it's too logical, empty even. I like Nolan and Nyla for the bits that we do know of her, but the emphasis is not on their emotions most of the time, but on their current state instead. I understand writing good characters that feel real is hard and you have managed to do so very well in fact, but I think they need to be expanded upon. Side characters though are actually well done, mostly due to the fact that they have a few chapters explaining the background and inner turmoil. I do have a problem with how long the side character chapters are, they take away from the main plotline of Nolan. This can be changed for the better by making their chapters a bit shorter, instead of four/three chapters make it two instead. A very important thing when writing a story with multiple viewpoints is to keep the tension at the end of each viewpoint. When we exit out of a Nolan chapter I want to get right back into it but have the same feeling once I finish the subsequent Jason or Nyla chapter. A lot of the chapters end in an anticlimactic way, and it makes going into another viewpoint a bit disappointing, I find myself trying to not simply skim through the Sersa and Jason chapters because I want to be back with Nolan all the time. As I stated, no goal is in sight so the plot feels like Nolan moving from one area to another aimlessly, just running from the newest danger. I do not mind this too much as we get to see the world and the flow is good, but I want to know more about what Nolan is thinking, even if it is simply looking at the new world he is in. I would even be glad for that, not something many stories do. While there is the thing with the underground lake and the ring it does feel a bit forced, I just hope that whatever comes out of it happens far away in the future of the story. Like someone has stated before, you should slow down in powerups because at this rate the story will progress too fast, even with its length, better to give Nolan more tools than to raise his cultivation. but it seems you are already doing this, so I am glad.
Overall definitely one of my favourites and I hope more people find this because currently, it is one of the only stories deserving of the overused "hidden gem" title. The review rating system on the RR sucks sadly, as I am basically forced to make a 5-star review or I will hurt your rating due to the influx of such ratings, but this is just me complaining.
P.S I would like to have some sort of map simply outlines would do, depicting the area/continent/world they are in, just anything of reference to make it easier to understand distance and such.
The first 10 or so chapters are great, what follows isn't as good, but good nonetheless. I didn't enjoy the sudden powerup.
No stupid weeboness here, no MC referring to a video game or cultivation novel for guidance.
Actual character interactions, not some generic mannerism with copy and pasta interaction you would see in anime. A huge + considering we are at royalroadl
So few reviews, a truly underrated work here. Check it out, its worth the time!
I've kept a watchful eye on this novel for a while, though never gave it a shot until a couple days ago due to the paywall. I took a gamble and bought the first two books to read on a flight.
For a cultivation novel, the first book was excellent and fleshed out. No courting deaths or Mt Tais here. The cultivation system could've been fleshed out but at this stage is not too important IMO. I could even remember the MCs name by the end of my read. I saw that some readers didn't like the multiple POVs, but I quite enjoyed it; it was something fresh. My only gripe was that the MC felt like insert character even though he wasn't set out to be? Idk its hard to explain. Not necessarily a bad thing, but just not a huge fan of that especially since the novel seems to be quite character focused (with all the POVs and all that).
NOW, FOR THE SECOND BOOK.
I felt like the first half of the second novel was a slice of life novel. Not much action, not much anything. That's a lot considering the second book was 340 pages in total. It picks up around the halfway point, but never reaches the climax I was hoping it would.
This is just my opinion, but I felt the author was using a few annoying cliches etc grandpa Doehring appearing outta nowhere, the infinite inheritances in the ring. I didn't mind that the ring had a calming effect; noone (at least I) don't wanna see a hesitant MC. This is a cultivation story after all.
I highly recommend the novel to cultivation fans. Just don't expect anything mindblowing.
I started reading this book a while ago and now I find my self hooked on the story and eagerly waiting for the next chapter.
I enjoy the plot, the characters, the descriptions of Venara. I found Jason's chapters a bit difficult to read, because I am not a fan of caves and darkness, the blood lake and the events where like a nightmare to me. It scared me. The author achieved his objectives, by vividly describing that surreal world.
I enjoy reading Nolan's adventures and can't wait to read the rest of this imaginative world.
It is worth mentioning the author's descriptions and narrative are well executed.
Been binging chapters since I found this. Great writing and story so far. Please write more.
Good writing/grammar, solid story, and decent characters. Would recommend.
What happened to chapters 3 to 17? Trying to start this series but this is way too big of a gap to ignore
EDIT: So i was able to read the first several chapters on kindle unlimited and then came back here to continue reading. Definately enjoyed the story quite a bit so far. Have not finished it yet but i like what i have read and recommend giving it a chance.