Re;Hell Gate (OLD)

by TheCrow

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

Leiu, 24-years-old, is a person who is struggling between finding a decent job with regular income and providing care for his family, after spending a long time working part time jobs, he finally has enough money to buy the new VRMMO game that's about to be released.

This is a story about his adventures and progress in this new game.

Author's note: Be aware, this story contains drama, tragedy, horror and so on, so I advise to think twice before reading it or else you might regret it later.

WARNING: If you are not a fan of the stories which contain overpowered Main Character, then there is no need to read this.

PS: This story is a bit special, as some of its plot and similar things will be decided by the viewers only, I would make a voting poll and it's up to YOU, to decide what happens, it may not happen always, but there will surely be sometimes when the readers are the ones making decisions and progressing the story.

 

 

  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score
  • Total Views :
  • 0
  • Average Views :
  • 0
  • Followers :
  • 662
  • Favorites :
  • 117
  • Ratings :
  • 120
  • Pages :
  • 0
Advertisement
Remove
Go to Table of Contents
Rate it
Fiction breaking rules? Report
Advertisement
Remove
Author
TheCrow

TheCrow

The Immortal Crow

Achievements
Word Count (15)
2,500,000 Views
2,000 Followers
500 Comments
Author Premium Early Bird
Fledgling Reviewer (I)
First Review Upvote
Top List #1000
Easter Event Search Party - Bronze Medal
4th Anniversary
Advertisement
Remove
Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date

Leave a review

drakan_glasses BE NICE! Fair critique is fair, but be respectful & follow the review rules. There will be no mercy.
Reviews
Sort by:
JuliusSneezer
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Fairly nice concept. I also like how the author posts frequent polls asking various questions.  The main story is nice but I have a somewhat small regret not being able to perfectly picture the scenarios because I have a bit of obsession on this matter. I'm also ever-so slightly saddened by it's romance not taking shape yet.

Sobek
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Hey just decided to leave this review to show my appreciation for this story.

Before you get all mad that I only gave it a 3.5 I'll say that I'm thoroughly enjoying this read so far, and I'm just inserting my criticisms which you may disagree with.

For me the story really doesn't stand out that much and neither do the characters. It's a fact that the not well off anti-social VR gamer who is mildly but not completely OP has been done many many times before. I'm not saying that's a bad thing though. It's not often that someone is able to nail this trope well and the author of this is doing pretty well for the most part. Which is why I didn't give it an even lower score than I did.

My complaints are mainly that it's written in a style that I've never really been able to get into, which is mostly found in Asian light novels. I mean I can't really blame the author for that one cause bite me if I'm wrong but it seems as though he is in fact Asian.

This leads to my next complaint, and compliment if you see it as such. The grammar. Tbh it's not really that bad. And all things considered is pretty passable. Sentence structure is ok. (About as good as mine lol) and even though there are some points when you can tell that the author missed a word or used the wrong tense this can easily be ironed out with an editor or a proofreader. (Also is it just me or has the grammar gotten better the further in you get)

The reason why I'm giving this a review in the first place and the reason I think it deserves at least some attention is the user interactive aspect. I find it really cool that the author consistently finds ways to have the audience help decide the direction of the story. It makes for a really fun experience. While most authors say there will be polls and such this author seems to be doing a pretty nice job being consistent.


Anyway keep up the good work.

Supreme being of death
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

 Dude why you have to make your title so much better than mine so sick. Dude it's so awesome I read the first chapter I was going to read the second chapter but it's your title was so much better than mine. I was going to read chapter 3 but it was still better than mine. Not bad.............. ..... . I'm joking if u haven't tell.. it great keep up the good work.