Into the Black

by Mirikon

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

The first truly immersive Virtual Reality system has just been announced. Made by NERV, the EVA-series immersion pods promise a Better Than Life experience, unlike anything that's been seen before. Gone are clunky goggles and wired controls. Now you simply lie down, and the machine does all the work.

 

Following up on their previous hit games, NERV has created the first true VRMMORPG, a sci-fi offering called Dreams Amongst the Stars. Because of the impressive display he made during the closed Beta of the game, one player has been offered a contract as a paid streamer, and the chance to play the game on the highest difficulty possible. Watch as he forges his own path, into the black.

 

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Dramatis Personae (Not a chapter) (SPOILERS!) ago
Book I Prologue - Dying Light ago
Chapter 1 - Abandon Ship ago
Chapter 2 - Interview ago
Chapter 3 - Enter the Game ago
Chapter 4 - Choose Your Path ago
Chapter 5 - Game Start ago
Chapter 6 - Learning Your Place ago
Chapter 7 - The Escape, Part I ago
Chapter 8 - The Escape, Part II ago
Chapter 9 - The Ship ago
Chapter 10 - The Girl ago
Book I Epilogue - Patch Notes ago
Book II Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 11 - Special Delivery ago
Chapter 12 - Auction Night on Choson Ring ago
Chapter 13 - Rules of Acquisition ago
Chapter 14 - Mindy Lou's Brew ago
Chapter 15 - Public Relations ago
Chapter 16 - Dark Net Connection ago
Chapter 17 - Getting Out of Dodge ago
Chapter 18 - Navy Problems ago
Chapter 19 - Settling In ago
Chapter 20 - Those Who Follow ago
Book II Epilogue - Patch Notes 2.X ago
Book III Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 21 - Close Quarters ago
Chapter 22 - Fleet Base Bagthara ago
Chapter 23 - Decisions and Retail Therapy ago
Chapter 24 - 'Black Don' Ramirez ago
Chapter 25 - Todea ago
Chapter 26 - Smuggler's Reach ago
Chapter 27 - Poker Night Denied ago
Chapter 28 - Red Orchids Return ago
Chapter 29 - Aggressive Negotiations ago
Chapter 30 - Through the Gate ago
Book III Epilogue - Patch Notes 3.X ago
Book IV Prologue - CNN (Confederate News Network) Broadcast ago
Chapter 31 - Local Color ago
Chapter 32 - Sand in My... ago
Chapter 33 - Smuggler's Blues ago
Chapter 34 - The Missing Harvester ago
Chapter 35 - The Sietch ago
Chapter 36 - Honor(less) Fight ago
Chapter 37 - Tradition ago
Chapter 38 - Return to keen-Arra ago
Chapter 39 - Ambushed ago
Chapter 40 - Ever Onward ago
Book IV Epilogue - Patch Notes 4.X ago
Book V Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 41 - Quarantine Zone ago
Chapter 42 - Charybdis Station ago
Chapter 43 - The Heist, Pt 1 ago
Chapter 44 - The Heist, Pt 2 ago
Chapter 45 - Return to Charybdis ago
Chapter 46 - The Shipyard ago
Chapter 47 - Shadowdancer ago
Chapter 48 - The Market ago
Chapter 49 - Evacuation ago
Chapter 50 - Exterminatus ago
Book V Epilogue - Patch Notes 5.X ago
Book VI Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 51 - Concerted Chaos ago
Chapter 52 - Tarpit ago
Chapter 53 - Valkyries' Test ago
Chapter 54 - Spoils ago
Chapter 55 - Dimiya ago
Chapter 56 - Night on the Town ago
Chapter 57 - Upgrades ago
Chapter 58 The Arena ago
Chapter 59 - Preparations ago
Chapter 60 - Sands of the Arena ago
Epilogue - Patch Notes 6.X ago
Book VII Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 61 - The Fall of Askao VII ago
Chapter 62 - Business Ventures ago
Chapter 63 - The Black Star Fleet ago
Chapter 64 - Return to Choson Ring ago
Chapter 65 - Fallout ago
Chapter 66 - Interlude ago
Chapter 67 - Loyalists ago
Chapter 68 - Family Reunion ago
Chapter 69 - Death's Shadow ago
Not a chapter. ago
Chapter 70 - The Battle of Edena ago
Book VII Epilogue - Patch Notes 7.X ago
Book VIII Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 71 - Convoy Duty ago
Chapter 72 - Cantina ago
Chapter 73 - Black Star Marines ago
Chapter 74 - Raxicore Base ago
Chapter 75 - Yamato ago
Chapter 76 - Slave Ranch ago
Chapter 77 - Bagthera Falls ago
Chapter 78 - Interlude From the Home Front ago
Chapter 79 - Defectors ago
Chapter 80 - Preparations ago
Book VIII Epilogue - Patch Notes 8.X ago
Book IX Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 81 - Event Quest ago
Chapter 82 - Ceti Alpha 5 ago
Chapter 83 - Inverse Process ago
Chapter 84 - Stalking Horses ago
Chapter 85 - Mars Attacked ago
Chapter 86 - Ceres Shipyards ago
Chapter 87 - Ravished Venus ago
Chapter 88 - The Battle for Earth ago
Chapter 89 - The Eye of the Storm ago
Chapter 90 - Destroyer of Worlds ago
Book IX Epilogue - Patch Notes 9.X ago
Book X Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 91 - Complications ago
Chapter 92 - Rite of Luwreni ago
Chapter 93 - Return to Dimiya ago
Chapter 94 - Future Plans ago
Chapter 95 - Tracking the Rats ago
Chapter 96 - Assault on Booty Bay ago
Chapter 97 - An Example ago
Chapter 98 - Preparing the Expedition ago
Chapter 99 - Scouting Mission ago
Chapter 100 - Spatium Incognita ago
Epilogue - Patch Notes 10.X ago
Book XI Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 101 - Nuevo Edo ago
Chapter 102 - Meeting the Locals ago
Chapter 103 - Trade Deals ago
Chapter 104 - Demons! ago
Chapter 105 - Interrogating the 'Demons' ago
Chapter 106 - Public Exposure ago
Chapter 107 - Amazonian Assault ago
Chapter 108 - Destroyer of Worlds (Again) ago
Chapter 109 - End of an Era ago
Chapter 110 - Politics ago
Book XI Epilogue - Patch Notes 11.X ago
Book XII Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 111 - The Return ago
Chapter 112 - The Scout ago
Chapter 113 - Concern ago
Chapter 114 - Preparation ago
Chapter 115 - Contact ago
Chapter 116 - Variant Hunt ago
Chapter 117 - Pack Tactics ago
Chapter 118 - Victory ago
Chapter 119 - Butcher's Bill ago
Chapter 120 - Heroes ago
Book XII Epilogue - Patch Notes 12.X ago
Book XIII Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 121 - Funerals ago
Chapter 122 - Recruits ago
Chapter 123 - Back Channels ago
Chapter 124 - Concerns ago
Chapter 125 - 'Pirates' ago
Chapter 126 - Public Relations (Retaliations?) ago
Chapter 127 - Discovery ago
Chapter 128 - Confrontation ago
Chapter 129 - Resolution ago
Chapter 130 - Dungeon ago
Book XIII Epilogue - Patch Notes 13.X ago
Book XIV Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 131 - Sand, Again ago
Chapter 132 - Should Have Known Better ago
Chapter 133 - Settling Accounts ago
Chapter 134 - Dusting Off ago
Chapter 135 - Choices ago
Chapter 136 - Catching Up ago
Chapter 137 - Design Theory ago
Chapter 138 - Liasons ago
Chapter 139 - Hunting Practice ago
Chapter 140 - Shadowdancing ago
Book XIV Epilogue - Patch Notes 14.X ago
Book XV Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 141 - Maneuvers ago
Chapter 142 - Business Meeting ago
Chapter 143 - Tietera Run ago
Chapter 144 – Ambush at Zanchul Station ago
Chapter 145 - Interrogation ago
Chapter 146 - Battlecruiser ago
Chapter 147 - Infiltration ago
Chapter 148 - Weapons Free ago
Chapter 149 - Cassandra ago
Chapter 150 - Shockwaves ago
Book XV Epilogue - Patch Notes 15.X ago
Book XVI Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 151 - Fortress ago
Chapter 152 - Recruitment ago
Chapter 153 - Pilot and Mechanic ago
Chapter 154 - Hacker ago
Chapter 155 - Spy ago
Chapter 156 - Marine ago
Chapter 157 - Special Delivery ago
Chapter 158 - Gathering ago
Chapter 159 - Unknown ago
Chapter 160 - Landfall ago
Book XVI Epilogue - Patch Notes 16.X ago
Book XVII Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 161 - Into the Unknown ago
Chapter 162 - Outpost ago
Chapter 163 - Xenolinguistics ago
Chapter 164 - Contact ago
Chapter 165 - Reinforced ago
Chapter 166 - Testing ago
Chapter 167 - Emperor's Shadow ago
Chapter 168 - Meanwhile ago
Chapter 169 - Announcement ago
Chapter 170 - Heartseeker ago
Book XVII Epilogue - Patch Notes 17.X ago
Book XVIII Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 171 - Dinner Plans ago
Chapter 172 - Golden Throne ago
Chapter 173 - Succession ago
Chapter 174 - Networking ago
Chapter 175 - Butterflies ago
Chapter 176 - Guilds ago
Chapter 177 - Negotiations ago
Chapter 178 - Spy Games ago
Chapter 179 - Raiders ago
Chapter 180 - Technicalities ago
Book XVIII Epilogue - Patch Notes 18.X ago
Book XIX Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 181 - Delegation ago
Chapter 182 - Negotiations ago
Chapter 183 - Playing Hooky ago
Chapter 184 - Convoy Duty ago
Chapter 185 - Raiders ago
Chapter 186 - Before the Storm ago
Chapter 187 - The Storm Breaks ago
Chapter 188 - Last Stand ago
Chapter 189 - Delaying Action ago
Chapter 190 - Aftermath ago
Book XIX Epilogue - Patch Notes 19.X ago
Book XX Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 191 - Gathering the Fleet ago
Chapter 192 - Reconnaissance ago
Chapter 193 - Planning the Attack ago
Chapter 194 - Into Their Teeth ago
Chapter 195 - Coldana Besieged ago
Chapter 196 - Striking Force ago
Chapter 197 - Silent Running ago
Chapter 198 - Time on Target ago
Chapter 199 - Aftermath ago
Chapter 200 - Survivors ago
Book XX Epilogue - Patch Notes 20.X ago
Book XXI Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 201 - Researcher ago
Chapter 202 - Legitimate Businessman ago
Chapter 203 - Rest and Relaxation ago
Chapter 204 - Protest ago
Chapter 205 - Build Plan ago
Chapter 206 - Chain of Command ago
Chapter 207 - Guild Meeting ago
Chapter 208 - Admiralty Meeting ago
Chapter 209 - Closed Session ago
Chapter 210 - Starhunters ago
Book XXI Epilogue - Patch Notes 21.X ago
Book XXII Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 211 - Surprise Recuitment ago
Chapter 212 - Discovery ago
Chapter 213 - Scrappy ago
Chapter 214 - Space Hulk ago
Chapter 215 - Mystery ago
Chapter 216 - Contact ago
Chapter 217 - The Core ago
Chapter 218 - Fallback ago
Chapter 219 - Evacuation ago
Chapter 220 - After Action ago
Book XXII Epilogue - Patch Notes 22.X ago
Book XXIII Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 221 - Science Briefing ago
Chapter 222 - Below ago
Chapter 223 - Accident ago
Chapter 224 - Contact ago
Chapter 225 - Traders and Tradecraft ago
Chapter 226 - Bad Meeting ago
Chapter 227 - Negotiations ago
Chapter 228 - Visitation ago
Chapter 229 - Rupture ago
Chapter 230 - Starlight ago
Book XXIII Epilogue - Patch Notes 23.X ago
Book XXIV Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 231 - Upgraded ago
Chapter 232 - Radiance ago
Chapter 233 - Images ago
Chapter 234 - Control ago
Chapter 235 - Training ago
Chapter 236 - Lessons Learned ago
Chapter 237 - Ihm Arrogance ago
Chapter 238 - Pride ago
Chapter 239 - Spreading Darkness ago
Chapter 240 - Looking for Answers ago
Book XXIV Epilogue - Patch Notes 24.X ago
Book XXV Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 241 - Testing ago
Chapter 242 - Refugees ago
Chapter 243 - Planning ago
Chapter 244 - Preparedness ago
Chapter 245 - Looking for Answers ago
Chapter 246 - Investigation ago
Chapter 247 - Outbreak ago
Chapter 248 - Grim Tidings ago
Chapter 249 - Dead World ago
Chapter 250 - Command Decisions ago
Book XXV Epilogue - Patch Notes 25.X ago
Book XXVI Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 251 - Aftershock ago
Chapter 252 - Corporate Security ago
Chapter 253 - Scrimmage ago
Chapter 254 - Interrogation ago
Chapter 255 - Order of Battle ago
Chapter 256 - Corporate War ago
Chapter 257 - Maccara ago
Chapter 258 - Headquarters ago
Chapter 259 - Back in the Game ago
Not a chapter ago
Chapter 260 - Settlement ago
Book XXVI Epilogue - Patch Notes 26.X ago
Book XXVII Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 261 - Simply Business ago
Chapter 262 - A Day in the Life ago
Chapter 263 - Catspaw ago
Chapter 264 - Testing ago
Chapter 265 - Navy ago
Chapter 266 - Chained Maidens ago
Not a chapter ago
Chapter 267 - Picking Up the Pieces ago
Chapter 268 - Pride Goeth ago
Chapter 269 - Explorer ago
Chapter 270 - Chaos ago
Book XXVII Epilogue - Patch Notes 27.X ago
Book XXVIII Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 271 - Orbital Archaeology ago
Chapter 272 - Reflections on Chaos ago
Chapter 273 - Planning ago
Chapter 274 - Insertion ago
Chapter 275 - Message ago
Chapter 276 - Aftermath ago
Chapter 277 - Chaos Stirring ago
Chapter 278 - Sucker Punch ago
Chapter 279 - The Shattered Fleet ago
Chapter 280 - Resolve ago
Book XXVIII Epilogue - Patch Notes 28.X ago
Book XXIX Prologue - Trade Chat ago
Chapter 281 - Contract ago
Chapter 282 - Ritual ago
Chapter 283 - Escape ago
Chapter 284 - Hold ago
Chapter 285 - Grey Goo ago
Chapter 286 - Behind Enemy Lines ago

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jmwrigh831
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Having read and re-read the chapters posted so far, I can honestly say I enjoy this series. Sure, there are things wrong with it as the other reviews point out. But, this is a story set in a fantasy/space game. Realism is for reality.

I came here to be entertained by a decent or hopefully good story. I believe this story fullfills that. Might not be for everyone, but if you don't like it write a better story in whatever way want.

 

I will most likely buy these when I get the chance.

Saphyron
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Style
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Grammar
Character

Start is good rest is in my opinion not very good.

Been a while since I've done a review.

But this one deserves it.
The start of the story was promising, the world building something I enjoyed immensely. I even liked the random parts where they players talk "out of the game".

Sadly as seems with his other stories, he simply wants his harems and his dominance over female characters, in addition, everyone who is not MC becomes dull uninteresting side characters that are only there to satisfy the author's sex lust. All side characters become: yes chars and have no feeling behind them.

Thus I have to say the first chapters are good rest is garbage.

ASploogeyGhost
Overall

MC is OP

All balancing handicaps are completely negated early on.

MC is made inteligent, by making every one around him stupid.

NPCs are wholly unprepared for the simplest tactics which are contantly mentioned to be common in this universe.

MC is malicious and mean, having all the characteristics of a spoiled brat such as:

Overleveled weapon he gets for free

Never loses

Harem of desperate yes girls

Takes undeserved moral high ground

Moral bankrupty thinly disguised as pragmatism

NobodySpecial
Overall

THE PLOT HOLES ARE EVERYWHERE

 just so you know i'll mention stuff from the chapters so spoiler warning

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Siska
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Think of all those terrible isekai light novels/anime that came out after the success of SAO. Now imagine if the protagonist wasn’t a complete loser. Pretty much what this is, the same terrible story and lack lustre characters, but with a main character who actually fucks. If you like those stories, which hey, I wish I did, and want a more adult version, then bam, this is perfect. If you aren’t a fan of Gary Stue/Mary Sue stories, then hard pass. 

TKage N. Lee
Overall

I've been constantly skipping 'Into the Black' because of the title didn't appeal to me but damn am I find it a good read!

Jean Fere
Overall

So far feels like reading a cereal box.

There's no real hook. The author is trying to pull the reader in by putting characters in extremely bad situations but it just comes off as boring. There's extremely heavy use of rape and mind control slavery but once again it's boring. If you have slave fantasies I'd recommend the Gor novels.

The other major themes are equally badly done. The LitRPG is unengaging as the  MC really isn't building his character. VRMMO not even close on any level. Just plain dull.

CodeOrangutan
Overall

MC never challenged, insidious misogyny abounds

Reviewed at: Chapter 16 - Dark Net Connection

Read up to chapter 16. The writing is fine, but the story is cringeworthy and I find the treatment of women repugnant. 

The MC is never challenged by any adversity. Everything is a cakewalk. This is a literary power trip, pure wish fulfillment. An adolescent male sex and power fantasy.

The MC starts in "nightmare mode", but all this does is give him a bunch of extra character points, and a unique race as a science experiment. Oh, and a huge penis. 

He starts out in a jail of sorts, where he gets lots of sex training. He fucks and murders a female jailor to escape. 

The above chapter was reported and removed from RR, and so the author links to it offsite while excoriating the people who reported it as "whiny little shits" and "little bitches". 

Note that while the MC has no brain implants to control his character, both brain bombs and personality control electronics almost comes standard with all other slaves. 

Soon after escaping, he knowingly delivers a cargo of conditioned sex slaves, and buys himself a slave crew. He does not free them. They are all female.

One is repeatedly referred to as "the sullen sexpot" and "my pretty little Nomad" which means this is a real person he's talking to, a player. 

He keeps referring to the rules of acquisition, a Star Trek Ferengi reference, a culture that treats its women as property who are not even allowed to wear clothing.

He is attacked by a band of player thugs. One is female. He kills the men, so they will respawn. He turns the one woman into a mentally controlled sex slave who works for him in the nearest brothel. Again, this is a player. It will be three months before she can make a new character. 

The author pays homage to a literary universe from "the dark side of Tumblr", by including a society that uses nanotech to alter women mentally and physically into doglike pets. The mental changes are permanent. He finds some of this nanotech on the thugs. He intends to sell it. Not destroy it.

At this point I stopped reading. 

Adammax
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Grammar
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Squandered Opportunities

This review may contain minor spoilers, you have been warned.

 

I made it to chapter 30 before I decided to stop reading. The premise of this story wasn’t bad but not original.  I like that you used a science fiction setting instead of a fantasy based setting. However, everything prior to character creation was only adequate. It was neither compelling nor interesting. However, it wasn’t long enough to complain about. I also don’t see how knowing the main character is wheel chair bound or the rest of the back story presented, is important/relevant to the rest of the story. In short, everything before character creation needs some TLC.

The supporting characters are as flat as can be. Apart from their name, gender, race and status—I don’t know anything about them as individuals. There are two exceptions to this rule. I know that the elfish one was a virgin. I also know more about the princess however; even her character isn’t fleshed out that well. These facts, along with their slavery status are all the facts, I as a reader know about the supporting characters. They also lack individual personalities and all sound the same in the dialog. They lack any quarks that make your characters, individually unique or interesting.

The main character (I forget his name) comes across as slightly impersonal/uncaring who is out on a joyride. I really like the premise for the main character’s avatar and think his build has a lot of potential. However, your MC also comes across a flat and kind of numb. This guy is trapped in a wheel chair for the rest of his life and probably can’t even feel is lower ‘member’ even if he can get an erection. He then is sent into a virtual world where he can walk/run/fight and fuck again. Think about how amazing that would be to experience if you were in that situation. Now look at your main characters reaction. I’m paraphrasing here but it went something along the lines of “Oh yeah, I didn’t have any problems walking or moving about in the game” Where is the emotion? Where is the joy of being able to walk again, even if it is only a video game? This is only one example and there are ton of other ones I could have used. Your main character downplaying events like this and completely failing to react to events, that a real live person would have some type of emotinal reaction towards, is what killed my interest in your story. In 30 chapters I have only seen the MC be depicted as being natural, kinda serious and pissed. Real people have far more emotional depth then what I have seen from you characters.

Thor Aegir
Overall

A good universe ruined by a sadist slaver mc

Reviewed at: Chapter 17 - Getting Out of Dodge

The universe and narration is fine but the slaver and harem components are quickly more disgusting and boring than exciting.