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The first truly immersive Virtual Reality system has just been announced. Made by NERV, the EVA-series immersion pods promise a Better Than Life experience, unlike anything that's been seen before. Gone are clunky goggles and wired controls. Now you simply lie down, and the machine does all the work.
Following up on their previous hit games, NERV has created the first true VRMMORPG, a sci-fi offering called Dreams Amongst the Stars. Because of the impressive display he made during the closed Beta of the game, one player has been offered a contract as a paid streamer, and the chance to play the game on the highest difficulty possible. Watch as he forges his own path, into the black.
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Definetly an upgrade from RULES-FREE VRMMO LIFE, worldbuilding is better, sex scenes are less cringey and main character isn't as stupidly written as Zayn.
But still this one has most of the same errors, that made me quit halfway through (130 chapters).
1. It is the same power trip as above mentioned book, and surprisingly when in rules free vrmmo MC was op because of his unconventional choice of skills, here MC is OP because he gets extra points for chosing hardest dificulty, which was advertised like he would spawn in the middle of the battlefield during mortar barrage, and what he actually got was a lab with incompetent staff that taught him how to fuck (sic!).
2. Every character apart from MC is written like it is an episodic one. I don't know if it is because he gets new companions faster than the pacing should allow, or because this story is supposed to be about MC and not side characters. But taking his princess companion as an example, she is with him since first chapters of the story, and aside from the basic information, I don't know anything about her really. And same goes for his other companions and allies.
3. MC is the biggest problem, same as in "rules free vrmmo". I guess it is because author wants to create godlike character, but he is unable to because of readers. So he creates this one, with unfair amount of starting points and with disadvantages that he would easily overcome after week of gametime, and after another week he is almost godlike. Month later he is most powerfull being in the game, and from there the story loses all of the appeal. I guess if the premise of the story would be that MC is a "god" from the start, would make it easier to create world and story around him than making jump from 1 to 1000000 in few months, making the rest of the world feel silly.
Been a while since I've done a review.
But this one deserves it.
The start of the story was promising, the world building something I enjoyed immensely. I even liked the random parts where they players talk "out of the game".
Sadly as seems with his other stories, he simply wants his harems and his dominance over female characters, in addition, everyone who is not MC becomes dull uninteresting side characters that are only there to satisfy the author's sex lust. All side characters become: yes chars and have no feeling behind them.
Thus I have to say the first chapters are good rest is garbage.
Having read and re-read the chapters posted so far, I can honestly say I enjoy this series. Sure, there are things wrong with it as the other reviews point out. But, this is a story set in a fantasy/space game. Realism is for reality.
I came here to be entertained by a decent or hopefully good story. I believe this story fullfills that. Might not be for everyone, but if you don't like it write a better story in whatever way want.
I will most likely buy these when I get the chance.
Read up to chapter 16. The writing is fine, but the story is cringeworthy and I find the treatment of women repugnant.
The MC is never challenged by any adversity. Everything is a cakewalk. This is a literary power trip, pure wish fulfillment. An adolescent male sex and power fantasy.
The MC starts in "nightmare mode", but all this does is give him a bunch of extra character points, and a unique race as a science experiment. Oh, and a huge penis.
He starts out in a jail of sorts, where he gets lots of sex training. He fucks and murders a female jailor to escape.
The above chapter was reported and removed from RR, and so the author links to it offsite while excoriating the people who reported it as "whiny little shits" and "little bitches".
Note that while the MC has no brain implants to control his character, both brain bombs and personality control electronics almost comes standard with all other slaves.
Soon after escaping, he knowingly delivers a cargo of conditioned sex slaves, and buys himself a slave crew. He does not free them. They are all female.
One is repeatedly referred to as "the sullen sexpot" and "my pretty little Nomad" which means this is a real person he's talking to, a player.
He keeps referring to the rules of acquisition, a Star Trek Ferengi reference, a culture that treats its women as property who are not even allowed to wear clothing.
He is attacked by a band of player thugs. One is female. He kills the men, so they will respawn. He turns the one woman into a mentally controlled sex slave who works for him in the nearest brothel. Again, this is a player. It will be three months before she can make a new character.
The author pays homage to a literary universe from "the dark side of Tumblr", by including a society that uses nanotech to alter women mentally and physically into doglike pets. The mental changes are permanent. He finds some of this nanotech on the thugs. He intends to sell it. Not destroy it.
At this point I stopped reading.
just so you know i'll mention stuff from the chapters so spoiler warning
so firstly i'm not going to talk about the very first chapters in the beta test because to me they were fine, however one of the other reviews does say the start was basically the same as 'universe online'
so basically the nightmare dificulty makes no sense whatsoever, if you were going to make a chimera, why not put a stepford slave collar on it, guarenteed loyalty and you can program it's personality whatever way you want, if you make a chimera that can shapeshift you would certainly take precautions against it, you can do so many things like tracking collar/chip/etc to monitor it's location optionally with a self detonation to make sure it doesn't take it out, or give the staff an implanted ID so nothing could impersonate them, also why did they give the chimera a pair of spatial storage bracers that it can just remove, stop the stupid spatial storage part and make removing it impossible, this is where you could put the tracking software since it can't be taken off anyway, this is supposed to be nightmare difficulty right?
there are too many things i would do differently here to make the story actually obey logic here to put in one review
next is the royal coup, you have slave collars in this world right? why use potentially disloyal immortal mercanaries who are only around level 5 when the random prostitute slave they find is level 80, use the prostitute slaves to do the suicide bombing at the speed of light instead or better yet, use an AI
next, the gang fight on choson ring, sure they might not have expected the ship to use ship weapons on them but the rest of the gang was basically just showing up to say shoot me please, the protagonist basically mowed down the gang members with his highly inaccurate weapon without them doing anything, did he use his psy stun attack? do they have no resistance to psy stun attacks? doesn't it only last like 2 seconds? why didn't they pull out their own guns and butcher him like the low level person he is
next the ship fight, your eyes see light, lasers are light, if the destroyer has lasers they could kill you literally the moment you see them, the prince wants them dead, use your weapons to make them dead, this is an actual destroyer right? proper military grade destroyer spaceship, whatever weapons the MC has shouldn't even be able to scratch it's shielding with the amount of money the MC had, you also had the two fighters to add to that certain death trap, if you wanted to make it even slightly believable then just have some princess supporters on the destroyer take over the ship, blow up the fighters then self destruct before the prince faction takes the ship back
i haven't read part this point in the story at this time, but if you want continuous plot holes then read this book
This review may contain minor spoilers, you have been warned.
I made it to chapter 30 before I decided to stop reading. The premise of this story wasn’t bad but not original. I like that you used a science fiction setting instead of a fantasy based setting. However, everything prior to character creation was only adequate. It was neither compelling nor interesting. However, it wasn’t long enough to complain about. I also don’t see how knowing the main character is wheel chair bound or the rest of the back story presented, is important/relevant to the rest of the story. In short, everything before character creation needs some TLC.
The supporting characters are as flat as can be. Apart from their name, gender, race and status—I don’t know anything about them as individuals. There are two exceptions to this rule. I know that the elfish one was a virgin. I also know more about the princess however; even her character isn’t fleshed out that well. These facts, along with their slavery status are all the facts, I as a reader know about the supporting characters. They also lack individual personalities and all sound the same in the dialog. They lack any quarks that make your characters, individually unique or interesting.
The main character (I forget his name) comes across as slightly impersonal/uncaring who is out on a joyride. I really like the premise for the main character’s avatar and think his build has a lot of potential. However, your MC also comes across a flat and kind of numb. This guy is trapped in a wheel chair for the rest of his life and probably can’t even feel is lower ‘member’ even if he can get an erection. He then is sent into a virtual world where he can walk/run/fight and fuck again. Think about how amazing that would be to experience if you were in that situation. Now look at your main characters reaction. I’m paraphrasing here but it went something along the lines of “Oh yeah, I didn’t have any problems walking or moving about in the game” Where is the emotion? Where is the joy of being able to walk again, even if it is only a video game? This is only one example and there are ton of other ones I could have used. Your main character downplaying events like this and completely failing to react to events, that a real live person would have some type of emotinal reaction towards, is what killed my interest in your story. In 30 chapters I have only seen the MC be depicted as being natural, kinda serious and pissed. Real people have far more emotional depth then what I have seen from you characters.
Think of all those terrible isekai light novels/anime that came out after the success of SAO. Now imagine if the protagonist wasn’t a complete loser. Pretty much what this is, the same terrible story and lack lustre characters, but with a main character who actually fucks. If you like those stories, which hey, I wish I did, and want a more adult version, then bam, this is perfect. If you aren’t a fan of Gary Stue/Mary Sue stories, then hard pass.
grammar is good. style is fine too. plot is generic wish fulfillment, and characters are just.. flat. also exactly the same story as rules-free vrmmo life, just in space. and the author's focus on mind-controlled harems is somewhat creepy.
MC is OP
All balancing handicaps are completely negated early on.
MC is made inteligent, by making every one around him stupid.
NPCs are wholly unprepared for the simplest tactics which are contantly mentioned to be common in this universe.
MC is malicious and mean, having all the characteristics of a spoiled brat such as:
Overleveled weapon he gets for free
Harem of desperate yes girls
Takes undeserved moral high ground
Moral bankrupty thinly disguised as pragmatism
This story is the answer to the question "What happens if you cross a Gary Stu with an Edgelord?". I know you've been dying to find out.
Let's get the good things out of the way first as it shouldn't take long: props for quantity of writing and initial setting, it had potential. Aaand we're done.
And then it all went to pieces. Mostly because this story displays the level of creativity, emotional maturity and understanding of a teenager(one that read about BDSM). No challenges for the hero, no doubts, no self reflection, no real loss. He is always the smartest, sexiest, most dominant that ever dommed. He is a smirk on legs and don't you forget it. Fools that get in his way get wrecked. If you're picturing a frustrated villain fighting with children put this story down, you kinda know this one already.
The story is paint by numbers in the worst way:
See woman, enslave woman, directly or through clever trick that nobody thought of before. Or she is just smitten by his awesomeness field radiating from him, he is a smirk on legs after all. No real challenge, no failure.
Situation happens. He is so clever he comes ahead. Every...single...time. Despite AIs, developers and tens of thousands of other players(at the very least). He is the smartest after all. If you're not convinced he's the smartest you have game chats, where he is A. Either praised indirectly, or B. One ups everyone and drops some hints that he's the smartest/sexiest/the most powerful player.
Still not sure he is the smartest that ever smarted? Enter developer pikachu-face scene: 1. Darn that troublemaker gone and did it again, he found another previously undiscovered exploit/application of rules... 2. Nothing we can do but damage control...hope he doesn't wreck our stuff again.... 3. Never fear we have a surprise for him.
Rinse and repeat...ad nauseam.
TLDR: If I was to hazard a guess I would say that this was supposed to be a story about an anti-hero MC who is clever and surpasses all challenges.
It failed spectacularly, the hero is unlikable, faces no real challenge, the story is repetitive, the other characters are just 2D props there for him to shine. He is somewhat clever....always. Oh and of course the sexiest. Enjoy.