Body and Soul

by Andur

Original COMPLETED Adventure Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead Female Lead Magic Multiple Lead Characters Reincarnation Secret Identity Slice of Life Strategy Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

The whole room is fully ablaze when the fire turns blue and even hotter. And I still keep my hands on the rune, ignoring the sizzling of my flesh. After a while I notice the blue, roaring flames on the other side of the window. At the edge of unconsciousness, I listen to the screams of people as they are taken by the Inferno.

 

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If you find mistakes, pls tell, thx. I don't like mistakes.

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Currently I am not active in any other networks than royalroadl.com. Only here, I correct mistakes and errors.

If you read it anywhere else and have to pay for it, or have to deal with an annoying amount of advertisement, You Are Being Betrayed. You would do good if you make other people in that network aware of it. This is a free project of mine for the purpose of having fun. And if people try to make money with it you shouldn't bother visiting their website.

Books:

Until Death? http://royalroadl.com/fiction/629

Transcendence? http://royalroadl.com/fiction/1587

Beyond? http://royalroadl.com/fiction/2850

Coeus? http://royalroadl.com/fiction/4745

Court of Souls? http://royalroadl.com/fiction/6545

Agent of the Realm? http://royalroadl.com/fiction/7707

Law of Shadows http://royalroadl.com/fiction/9766

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1. ~Inferno~ ago
2. ~Ashes~ ago
3. ~Borderland~ ago
4. ~Others~ ago
5. ~Tarin~ ago
6. ~Departure~ ago
7. ~Marshwood~ ago
8. ~Marsh Riverbed~ ago
9. ~Squashed~ ago
10. ~City~ ago
11. ~Knowledge~ ago
12. ~Jebli Port~ ago
13. ~An Offer~ ago
14. ~Visitor~ ago
15. ~Art~ ago
16. ~Dreams~ ago
17. ~Money~ ago
18. ~Journeymen~ ago
19. ~Another Tale~ ago
20. ~Turmoil~ ago
21. ~Old Things~ ago
22. ~Contract~ ago
23. ~Wood~ ago
24. ~Never~ ago
25. ~Flexing Muscles~ ago
26. ~Social Status~ ago
27. ~Forward~ ago
28. ~Old Mine~ ago
29. ~Infestation~ ago
30. ~Wheels within wheels~ ago
31. ~Society.~ ago
32. ~New Horizon~ ago
33. ~Land Rights~ ago
34. ~Dinner~ ago
35. ~A long list of creditors~ ago
36. ~One Shot~ ago
37. ~Incident~ ago
38. ~Intermezzo~ ago
39. ~Life~ ago
40. ~Fete~ ago
41. ~Play them~ ago
42. ~Demonstration~ ago
43. ~Bye~ ago
44. ~As we are many~ ago
45. ~Pain~ ago
46. ~Rivalries~ ago
47. ~A discussion with the dead~ ago
48. ~Interlude~ ago
49. ~Vermin~ ago
50. ~Struck~ ago
51. ~Decisions~ ago
52. ~Joined~ ago
53. ~Dark Side~ ago
54. ~Agent~ ago
55. ~Island~ ago
56. ~Laos~ ago
57. ~Envoy~ ago
58. ~Diplomacy~ ago
59. ~Demonstration~ ago
60. ~Heights~ ago
61. ~Tie~ ago
62. ~Pets~ ago
63. ~Control~ ago
64. ~Hangar~ ago
65. ~Soul~ ago
66. ~Fled~ ago
67. ~Bedtime~ ago
68. ~Preparations~ ago
69. ~Deal with the Devil~ ago
70. ~A helping hand~ ago
71. ~Amitesh~ ago
72. ~Capacity~ ago
73. ~Top~ ago
74. ~Old~ ago
75. ~Reverse~ ago
76. ~As told~ ago
77. ~Bonds~ ago
78. ~Small~ ago
79. ~Bargain~ ago
80. ~World Assembly~ ago
81. ~Stage Two~ ago
82. ~Interlude~ ago
83. ~Negotiations~ ago
84. ~Another~ ago
85. ~A strange power~ ago
86. ~Pummeled~ ago
87. ~A complicated Truth~ ago
88. ~Orks~ ago
89. ~Day four~ ago
90. ~New~ ago
91. ~Interplay~ ago
92. ~Relax~ ago
93. ~About Power~ ago
94. ~Half truth~ ago
95. ~Pride~ ago
96. ~Old Bargain~ ago
97. ~New Bargain~ ago
98. ~An eye for...~ ago
99. ~Visions~ ago
100. ~End~ ago
101. ~Bargain~ ago
102. ~Mission~ ago
103. ~Patience~ ago
104. ~Voice~ ago
105. ~Worshipped~ ago
106. ~Share~ ago
107. ~Emperor~ ago
108. ~Reunion~ ago
109. ~Together~ ago
110. ~Introduction~ ago
111. ~Castella~ ago
112. ~Promises~ ago
113. ~Renovation~ ago
114. ~Resurrected~ ago
115. ~Roles~ ago
116. ~Clean Up~ ago
117. ~Living~ ago
118. ~Hide~ ago
119. ~Magic~ ago
120. ~Human Nature~ ago
121. ~Blame~ ago
122. ~As many~ ago
123. ~Hello World~ ago
124. ~Dinner~ ago
125. ~Aside~ ago
126. ~Rise~ ago
127. ~Joined~ ago
128. ~Request~ ago
129. ~Assembled~ ago
130. ~Decisions~ ago
131. ~Failsafe~ ago
132. ~Foe~ ago
133. ~Priorities!~ ago
134. ~Final~ ago
135. ~Ascension~ ago
136. ~Fin~ ago
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tsundereboy
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I wanted to let you know, that I made an account on this website, just to be able to comment your amazing work! I'm really impressed by how you allways keep toping your stories! Since I've discovered your little sotry collection, I've spent every free minute I have reading it! Thank you once again, for entertaining me so nicely :D

Now to my review:

Overall

Everyone that like your previous work, will also like this story.

Grammar:

I'm not a native, so I can't say much about how good your grammar is overall. But sometimes even I had to find some typos :(

Style:

The story is easy and fluent to read, just like all your other works. But sometimes it isn't quite clear for me, who was talking.

 

Story:

Luv it! I really like, how it is a little bit darker then your previous work. I also like, how the reincarnation thing isn't too much in the spotlight, like it was in ur other works.

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 Characters:

They are the same characters I've come to love and care about, for the past few fictions. Nothing much to say about them, except that Joyce could have been made a little bit crazier. She feels just too sane for someone that whith the past of a slave, especially because she was wearing that slave collar for over 80 years.

 

 

 

 

 

dekananakal
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first, sorry for numerous grammatical error, english is just not my daily language. ouch.. yell

 

I haven't read any of Andur's series before this, since im new here.. and.. this is my first review.. laughing sooo.. bear with it..

 

Great story so far..

I like the character development and how the story flow. Quick, but enough, not dragging for a long long long and many many many numerous chapters for each event, which is great, well at least for me, it made me not become bored when read it.

 

Only one point is lacking, at each chapters, Andur always begin with "**Joyce**" (for example), which pointing that the story os from Joyce point of view. But, most of the chapter are Joyce POV, like 90% all the time. I think it will be great if there are more other POV in the story, like several latest chapters with Zane POV. Maybe 70% main POV -30% other POV will be great, which can give reader another perspective for the character and the story it self. But so far, its great story, and i want moreeee.. yell

 

 

 

callmesteve
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I really liked this one, but since Armaell hasn't gotten the downloads done yet, I'm posting my homebrew version. Hopefully it looks good enough.

 

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1gSgG3zVrBtuLpMHry6WtFhtdjI3BTUMS?usp=sharing

Bookish Cipher
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This story is loads better than your previous stories, but, as you can see by my rating, there can be a lot of improvement. Like usual, I am not going to say a lot about the grammar. I mean, sure the words work together and what I read makes sense but the number of stupid mistakes (missing words, misspelled words, transitions, etc) drags the score down. (I say this even though the grammar is better than 90% of stories here)

Let's start with something simple: Style. You managed to get rid of a lot of filler that plagued your other works--not all but 60%--but now you have a different problem. More filler, by that I mean many unnecessary words that make no difference to the flow and meaning. It's not just words that are redundant but some paragraphs too. I find myself skimming through whole pages and still coming out with all meaning intact. 

Style isn't your biggest problem, The worst problem is your characters. What's her face said close to the end of the book that she remembers hundreds of lives... You would think that Nova would be smarter than a young adult and her opposition would also be a hell of a lot smarter too. How is it that they don't understand that their game style isn't sustainable? For that matter, how is it that Nova couldn't figure out how to escape from the slave collar when the whole damn city doesn't even have protection against something as simple as an inferno spell? How come eighty years isn't enough when she managed to conquer the world in a year? 

Then we have the addictive properties of slave collars. Addiction is an addiction and it is hard to break such habits. No matter how you look at it, Nova should've had more negative effects than slight anger problems. We also don't even see a resolution to her addictions, it was just swept under the rug.

Anyways, let's forget all of that and focus on how this feels like a copy of every other story before this one. Sure, the underlining story is different, the characters are different and the whole world is differe-... the same. Everything is the same, you basically changed some names and made the characters a bit more rational. The world is a bit more developed and the problems faced are just slightly harder...

Actually, that reminds me of how the main character somehow has the answer to everything. The conflicts she faces are trivial and are usually resolved by the end of each chapter. You are trying to distance yourself from how anime fails at life but it is not enough. The typical Mary Sue vibes are still present.  

TLDR: You can do better.