Body and Soul
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The whole room is fully ablaze when the fire turns blue and even hotter. And I still keep my hands on the rune, ignoring the sizzling of my flesh. After a while I notice the blue, roaring flames on the other side of the window. At the edge of unconsciousness, I listen to the screams of people as they are taken by the Inferno.
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Ok. My i am measuring my scores based of RRL quality but mostly off of the authors previous works. Lets be honest, if i just based this off of RRL standards this would be 5s across the board. Also if you are reading this before you read the book. I implure you to not let this review prevent you from reading "Body and Soul". This is my opinion read the book and make your own.
I am currently writting this review at chapter 64
Style: over all good. Only problem is that sometimes it just makes thing 'weird'. I find that the style in this novel is written around how the story should feel, and not the scenario that is going on. This makes it feel out almost off and out of place in certain parts that conflict with overall template. But this is rare.
Story: if this is your first book by Andur, the story will be fine bit genric in places, but over all good.
If you have read 3 or more. This will be really nothing but genric. Thats not bad, it won't in anyway kill the story. But it will hurt it. Like reading a story, forgetting you read it. Author rewrites it, you read it again with the nagging feeling that read this already. But the story is diffrent enough to the point were you know it is a diffrent book.
Grammar: really good. Few mistakes even if you look for them. Are a tiny few but in no way do they break the flow of the story.
Charachter: most novels i can just say, 'good' or bad. This is not so easy tho.
Good charachter devlopment to me is when. At the start i am given a feel on the general type of person the charachter is, and thru the progressen of the plot i can see how. he/she grows and changes while over coming hardships and challenges. Learning about them thru there actions and reactions aling the way.
While i see bad devlopment as, when the charachter stagnates and they do not change or grow tru the plot and i learn nothing about them.
I find this storys MCs character development pretty bad because shr never grows. There is only an illusion of growth. From the 2nd chapter to the 64th she does not grow or devlop as a character at all. While the story progresses we, Learn more about her. The more the author introduces us to the scheme she has going we see the type of person she is. Thats it, she was always that person. While there might of been plot reason on why we could not see her thinking that way, or the author just kept it hidden. She was always that person. Her lack of intrest has not changed, he view has not changed, her goal has not changed, nohing has changed. There has been no development and that's why i see it as, not good.
So thats what i think. If any of that changes while i read. I will update review.
I've read all of Andurs stories and enjoyed them, but atleast for me the whole multiverse/reincarnation theme turns old. There isn't much to say about the story itself, the grammar is except for negligible mistakes perfect, the character has clear attributes and thought patterns which are realistic, the writing style is entertaining and is easy to follow and the world seems organic.
My "critic" is that the basics of the story become predictable if you know Andurs other works, which harms my enjoyment while reading. It just feels like he is wasting his talent by sticking to the same characters in different reincarnations instead of trying new things.
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Story: the story looked very good in andur's oneshot series and i am happy that he is turning it into a full blown story.
The story follows a female slave who escapes her master and leaves a little present for him and humanity? the way it is going now the story follows the slave as she goes into the world and experiences new things and the world experiences her. the story follows a pretty standard line for now and i hope andur can surprise us with some interesting twist and hopefully some good intriguing plot's.
Grammar: its andur his grammar is almost always very good and if there are mistakes they are mostly small and quickly fixed.
Style: andur says it will be darker. lets hope he keeps it intriguing and goes into an interesting dark and not a bad overly rapy/murder spree for no reason dark. (which i find is bad dark story telling). uptill chapter 13 the story has seen a few darker parts but nothing to descriptive/gory.
Character score: andurs characters always have a very distinct personality and i am looking forward to see what he cooks up with this mc. Edit: the character is looking to be a strong and intelligent female mc with a bit of OP added in and also a mc who tries to use her brain before her brawl but is not afraid to go against people who try to bully her.
overall: if u like andur be sure to give this story a try and if you are new to andur you might want to check out some of his other less dark stories before you dive into this one.
Edit: i also hope andur try's a new format at some point because following the multiverse he has running now is interesting but becomes a bit dull and just more of the same. this does not at all mean that this story is bad just my opinion. ;)
I'm going to edit this controversial review entirely. At chapter 35, this review has garnered 17 thumbs up and 18 thumbs down to be at the bottom fo the first page of reviews. I've been following this story because short and the Andur is a good writer in general.
Pros and Cons below. Press "SHOW MORE" to see.
The beginning of this story starts off weak. It tries to be edgy, and the authors own comments indicate that it was supposed to be "darker", unless I read the wrong thing somewhere.
The main character starts out as a sex slave for an abusive master, and slave from birth. She also happens to be repeatedly reincarnated. She quickly finds her self in an event that leads to her freedom from her 'Slave Collar'. She uses her new found freedom to magically obliterate an entire city with a single spell because 'she understood magic more than them and they didn't have defenses for it'.
A pretty weak explinations/plot device to be honest.
It then goes on to describe how she knows all this stuff that the world doesn't know and will use it to make a position for herself.
Now, after that part, our main character for many chapters is ment with MINOR issues she has to deal with, that she typically deals with in a single chapter, or is resolved quickly into the next chapter.
At this point I felt the story was episodic, resolving every issue in a single chapter.
After this, around 20~ it started getting into more 'slice of magic adventure life' where she just traveled around 'doing things'.
She has a bunch of 'secret plans' that she 'begins to execute' but doesn't tell the audience the whole details of, but you get some parts of chapters that show other perspectives of people executing those plans.
There's also a strange point where the author tries to introduce some sort of reasoning for power in this world that feels week.
She has a flashback ina dream to when she's a slave, and they are picking her out of lineup of other slaves. The elf king says something like "She can't be one of them, can she? they are all gone.". I can only assume she's the chosen one/race or something.
From here, the story shifts to an almost comedy, where the joke is that the MC doesn't have any common sense and her massive power and understanding makes her do wacky out of this world stuff that baffles people and results in her going 'What's the big deal?', the punchline to literally every joke. Not the worst for a casual read.
TL;DR. Story goes through phases of Edgy to MarySue to SliceOfMagicLife.
- Easy and quick to read
- Great gammar and writing style as to be expected from someone who writes so much and is willing to accept feedback.
- Improves itself as it goes on as an enjoyable story
- Tries too hard to be edgy in the beginning which will turn off readers
- It indicates that perspectives are being used, by 95% of the time, it's the main character.
- The majority of alternative perspectives are completely unrelated to what the main character is doing, so you get little insight into what characters around her are thinking other than from the narration. There may be 1-2 parts that narrate from a character around her and describe what they are doing.
- MC always has an answer to everything though otherworldly magic which is apparently super easy to do as long as you know that it exists. A bit of a weak plot point, but I suppose I accepted it for 'Beyond?' which was great btw, so I guess I can try accepting it for here too. Though I felt 'Beyond?' did it better.
My hopes is that going forward it will maintain a more lighthearted nature for the bulk of the story and try to be fun. I would also enjoy more perspectives of other characters and what they are doing for the story. It feels a bit like an RTS where the MC is the player and all the side characters are units doing whatever the MC says to do.
Final words: The only other story I read entirely from Andur (and I loved it) was 'Beyond?'. This story so far doesn't live up to that in its early chapters.
I don't want to do an advanced review as this story is weird. Now some may not find this not to be an issue but for me the quality of the writing has degraded in this story. It started out with an very interesting premise and followed up with a well written expansion the world that was established. It's when we get to the later development of the character and story that we see problems. First as a reader I don't know most of the motivations of the MC and while there is plenty of story written from the MC's point of view as a reader I am not privilege to the thoughts and desires of the MC. This becomes a major problem as the MC goes through several major events without the reader knowing the impact of these on the MC. The author seems to have a general direction or plot lined out for this novel and its seems pretty good from what I know so far but the pacing of this novel is too fast to carry out the plot. This story needs long sections of dialogue and action only told from the point of view of the MC so as a reader I can better understand the thoughts and feelings behind the MC. The reason the story is weird as the side characters are better set up than the main character which leads to disconnect problems as I empathize with the side characters more than the MC as the major plot points are usually half or more told from the point of view of the side characters. I like this author and from their other works this wasn't an issue for me so hopefully this review doesn't influence them negatively as I am a fan of some of their earlier works.
So this is Andur's new project and judging from the plethora of stories he's come out with, you can expect a consistantly good result.
(If you haven't read his other works, I recommend getting to those as they're good fun reads)
There aren't really enough chapters yet to give a decent review, but to be honest, I just felt that rating this sooner than later would at least expedite its rise to the best active list so that I don't have to search for it every time I log on.
Totally selfish reasons, but still looking forward to the story!
Edit: Well, that didn't take long, story made it to the front page already!
I think the reincarnation theme that used in Andur's novels is a fantastic way to keep readers of his other stories entertained with guessing who is who from his past novels. This story is a bit darker than his other novels so far, and starts a bit slow like most novels on royalroad but is shaping up very well. If you enjoy an intelligent MC then you will love this and Andur's other works.
IMO Andur is the best author on RoyalRoad by far and you can't go wrong with any of his stories. Personally my favorite type of MC is the intelligent / scientist / engineer type character and the mc is such in all of his novels.
As a note for the author I'll just say that I've not been dissatisfied with the multiverse continuing to run and will happily read your next story regardless of what direction you try to take it, keep up the good work! Also if you need any help with editing I would be happy to do so.
This story is the first of many of read by Andur. He is prolific on RRL and has many quality stories to his name.
Honestly, this one is a banger and I highly recommend you give it a go if you haven't already. Plus it's completed which is a rarity in itself on this site!!
I really liked this one, but since Armaell hasn't gotten the downloads done yet, I'm posting my homebrew version. Hopefully it looks good enough.
first, sorry for numerous grammatical error, english is just not my daily language. ouch..
I haven't read any of Andur's series before this, since im new here.. and.. this is my first review.. sooo.. bear with it..
Great story so far..
I like the character development and how the story flow. Quick, but enough, not dragging for a long long long and many many many numerous chapters for each event, which is great, well at least for me, it made me not become bored when read it.
Only one point is lacking, at each chapters, Andur always begin with "**Joyce**" (for example), which pointing that the story os from Joyce point of view. But, most of the chapter are Joyce POV, like 90% all the time. I think it will be great if there are more other POV in the story, like several latest chapters with Zane POV. Maybe 70% main POV -30% other POV will be great, which can give reader another perspective for the character and the story it self. But so far, its great story, and i want moreeee..