Lone: The Wanderer

I finished book 1 left with a feeling this could have been pretty good. The story in itself is quite interesting, the worldbuilding is very good and most of the sidecharacters are properly written.

Sadly all of this is ruined by a main character who's a bi-polar psychopath, kidnapper, manchild and child abuser. Couple that with a kidnapping victim who is a goddess in a little girls body with a bad case of stockholm syndrome and you've got the main characters of our story.

Worst part is I read a review saying he gets better, except he doesn't. He gets worse.  At no point in this story will I describe this main character as likeable.

If thats your cup of tea, you'll have a blast reading this story. If you're like me, don't bother.

 EDIT: Rewrite is fantastic! <3

First i'm sorry but i don't speak english very well so there will be a lot error i hope you can understand.

So i don't finish the story immediatly but i plan to (i'm up to chapter 80). Î found your story original and i absolutly loved the beginning and the fact that he wants to be OP be he chooses to do it slowly and not immediatly. But i found that arround chapter 40 he is presented as OP too much even if you try to show that he isn't OP it's can of contradicting. And i found that he's growing too quickly for someone who doesn't want to be right now.

The second point is that he doesn't like people but he become close with a lot of people but again toi quickly : he's alone (with Sophie) for arround 30 chapters and in 30 other he became close with the Tailor, guildmaster, noble people,etc... I found it a bit too quick. Same with his behavior with people it's not a problem if it change but it was too sudden.

And last of thing i didn't like at first was the romance... It was too quick and doesn't make sense : she like his tails but he kidnapped her so she still hate him, then sleep with him, then her past, then i love you !! Where's her hate gone ? It couldn't dissapear like this ? Don't misunderstand, i'm absolutly not against their couple but it's disappointed that it happened so soon and that you didn't develop how their feeling for each other evolved.

Exept these point i found disappointed for me i found it's a good novel, i've not finished it yet but it seems promissing and  intéressés so  you should read it to forge your own opinion and not being influence by the other review. You might like it or not, it depend of you.

Let's begin with the characters, since that's the worst score and work up:

The main character is contradictory and excessive in what he portrays. On one hand he is a professor at a university and is clearly capable to interact with his students on a regular basis, otherwise he wouldn't keep that job for very long.

Next thing he lashes out at the being which gives him a chance at a new life. Granted it's a stressful situation, but the extend to which that develops is questionable.

Now to further argue my review I have to spoiler the story to a certain degree so be aware of that and decide for yourself if you want to continue reading.

Because he is annoyed he basically imprisons a innocent girl, a child in his eyes, in an empty dimension. Yes, the first chapter establishes a possible reason for his behaviour, but I don't find it to sufficient to justify his reactions towards the girl, especially since she is some kind of divinity. I doubt wether anybody would be that snarky with such a powerful being, even if he was the worst arse on earth...

It goes further since that being(1000 or so years old by the way and capable of assuming her adult-form) then goes on to develop a crush on him. So basically a case of stockholm-syndrom.

Sounds bad doesn't it? Well it is to a degree, the saving grace is, that the character development of both the mc and the support-cast is logical and moves forward in a coherent way. It gives me hope for the future of the novel, especially since the MC grows to be more likeable the further you read.

Grammar and style are solid. Not much I can say there. No awful mix up'swith words and the mistakes are minor most of the time. There is room for improvement, but I'm no literary student.

Story:

The story is interesting, from the beginning you know there is more to this than just the reincarnation of the mc and his journey through the various nation on this new planet. He explores the world and grows while doing so, which I assume prepares him for what is to come :) This is what kept me interested and with the story, until the MC grew to be more likeable.

If you like powerful leads and far-reaching storylines endure the first fifty-ish chapters and see for yourself.

I often don't review like this, but it needs to be made clear that though at the start of this story the main character seemed to rush into power and was unrelatable. Through the story's progression and the writer improving his own skill, it grows into a fantastic fiction. I am also aware that the writer is doing rewrites on the first part of the story, and I highly recommend that people read his other fiction, SHOVEL KNIGHT!! It's pretty damn great. 

Style: In terms of style this story is a fantasy LitRPG, which is a pretty popular way of writing, and is set in a swords & magic world. I appreciate the way he uses the LitRPG aspects as well. He doesn't have boxes and numbers for every little thing; however, when something important happens he also isn't stingy about showing us what's changed in our main character's stat sheet or in a crafted item. 5/5

Story: In terms of story, I love the way Lone, that's the author name as well, by the way, builds his world with bits and pieces of the bigger picture slowly being revealed. Unlike some novels where if you compare what you know about the lore of the world at the beginning versus a couple thousand pages in you realize hardly anything has changed Lone: The Wanderer isn't like that. Where I am at in the story, Book 4 Chapter 12, I can look back and say with certainty that I know much more about what is going on in the background then I did in the start. Moreover, I can determine that there is still a lot missing in my understanding of events. 5/5

Grammar: Well I can't remember noticing any major errors that weren't corrected shortly after posting if there were any. I also don't recall any minor errors. I might have just not noticed them, but then they don't really matter do they? 5/5

Character:  Spoiler: Spoiler

Overall: In conclusion, this story is awesome and you should definitely read it even if you have skip sleeping or eating. This story is more important than those things anyway. Fluffiness is the best! Pauses writing to go kowtow to the fluffiness gods 5/5

Fair warning my rating is for the rewrite and not the original. So I have had the great fortune to read this really great story. The rewrites are fanominal. After that tho the original book is subpar in comparison which is a real shame as I love the story but so many things are different it's a hard transition. To make the transition easier for those of you who decide to pick it up I would recommend reading 1-14 of the rewrites then after that go to the original so there is less of a disconnect. Instead of being 82 chapters in and suddenly be at chapter 15 in the original and the 83 chapter in the original is quite different than the rewrites.

I’ve been reading this for a long ass time and every time I get the notification, I drop what I’m reading and immediately switch to this. If you’re looking for a great read, Lone’s your guy

honestly the only thing i can say is it's my favorite non-fanfic work. absolute perfection :)

i dont really have anything else to say but i need more characters to post my review. sophie is best girl.

just read all the rewrites and they are all great. cut as this is my first read of this story i have no idea what the hell happens in the story gap, reckon u can put the originals back up plz?

Thanks.

 Most of the problem is the MC with the drastic mood swings and uncalled-for reactions. The world tree and dungeon are pretty good examples. The dungeon the character seems to go on a saint personality change for a few chapters then suddenly goes all out devil. Then when it gets to the world tree he is out right shitty to everyone to the point as a reader even I wanted to kick his ass.

Every time a new interesting character is introduced the MC almost right away tries to screw him/her over making that character hate the MC and most of the time without a reason for doing it.

I looked through some of the other reviews and there is quite a few people that dislike the MC. About all that is propping up the story is the regular updating and story plot.