Dungeon Heart
by MinningDragon
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The death of an old dwarf, the reincarnation of an old soul into a dungeon. He was expecting a peacefull, lonely death, and now he is a dungeon. Well, it could be worse, after all, dwarves are at home underground. Now he has to re-discover how to survive in this new life. He and his creations must carve out their place in the world with their own hands.
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Love it!
I imagine him with the voice of the singer from the song from lotr misty mountains cold!
i love the story so far keep it on im realy hyped about it!
Good Ideas but lacks coherence
Style: Just okay.
Story: Has a decent concept but severely lacks anything to drive the narrative. Each story arc feels very disconnected from the last.
Grammar: Fine and shows steady improvement.
Characters: Have high potential given their positions and backstories but are not memorable beyond their initial introductions and have little to no coherent motivations.
Familiar but unique and interesting
I love how the MC is taking so much pride and work into making his dungeon and making it this beautiful place instead of just focusing on how to kill people to gain power. Really looking forward to how this will work out.
Also I really want to see how people react if they are inside the dungeon when he starts singing one of his songs. As another reviewer said I would like to see that become a regular thing.
An above average story by royal roads standards.
Decent story with a slightly different take on the dungeon genre. However the story became predictable and very generic as it went on. Everyone and their mother just worships the dungeon, random deity rewarding the dungeon for no reason other than cus it's cool and now we have a new cast of generic characters coming to the dungeon town brough on by how cool and unique the dungeon is. Not bad, but grossly overrated.
Solid
This story has many strong points as well as quite a few weak points. One thing that I love about it is the dungeon building and creatures, since that is pretty much the staple of a good dungeon core story. The artistic descriptions and emotion conveyed is awesome.
Another thing I loved was the side characters and their interactions. The bosses and the adventurers both had me invested in their stories.
For weaknesses, I'd have to say my least favorite aspects of the story is the weird shit, like putting eyes on top of the dungeon entrance or singing at people. Like someone watched the hobbit before writing this, and that was pretty much my least favorite part of the hobbit.
At this point a lot of the story has been told from the perspective of the side characters and that sometimes feels like it's taking away from what I enjoy so much about dungeon stories in the first place, that being the actual dungeon building. I also disliked how extended the portions from the point of view of the antagonists was and how much time some things took.
Good Story
Reviewed at: Chapter 38
I read this as it was coming out. And i've enjoyed it. Now that he has it published on Amazon. I intend to Buy it. I tend to make it a point to buy books published when i enjoyed them for free.
Congratulations to the author for getting that far! I look forward to re-reading your published book.
Would recommend for your executive time
Reviewed at: Vol. 2, Chapter 14
Disclaimer: this is personal opinion, I have no delusions about my skills or experience in the field, so take it all with a grain of salt, as you should.
This review will present my opinion on three subjects: plot, characters and the system(yes, I have personal grievances with system, bite me).
First, I would like to start with how appreciative I am of the nicely thight and focused plot of the first volume. While the events may not have flown seamlessly from one to the other, there is still a fair justification and link between them all. I did not have the impression that a sword of Damocles kept popping out of nowhere just for the reader's sustained frustration. Delectably moderate amount of foreshadowing (especially considering the genre).
Now, let's get to the characters. Very interesting dynamic here. The dungeon heart is, rather obviously the heart of the story. All other characters, their impressions and their development is one way or the other tied to him. Now this, while helping to keep the spacial scope of the novel focused, is a huge downside for the development. I honestly do not care to know how each of his creatures venerate him everytime their point of view shows up. I would have liked to see more of their day to day life and interactions when not religiously admiring him or his work. A unique opportunity to add dimensions to their character have been sacrificed for the sake of plot advancement in my opinion, especially considering that a specific loyalty related skill should have created a window into some inner troubles and reflections. The frenzies should also have had their place in any psyche oriented disussion that might have had arisen. And then there's the fact that all characters' reactions are frankly very muted and tame even. Some of it could be accredited to physical shells but still. I am still waiting for that PTSD chapter for the artisan that had never killed a soul before. It would have also been great to get to know the adventurers better. Not only in their professional modew where not much is being aside from vital communications/order and the occasional quip to relieve tension. It would have been nice a deeper dive into who they are they are and how they live. Especially since they represent a kice diversified contrast to the dungeon zealous cult-like spawns.
And lastly, the system. What I like about it, is how that it's making itself scarce enough. That's great. However there are quite a few gaps in how everything fits together.We clearly do not have enough information from the sapient pov, so all we have gping is the dwarf's word on how it's done via some cultivation. Which is not much considering he spent centuries in isolation.
To conclude it's a nide ride, with an engaging plot with a nice flow. Not very immersive though, since all characters POVs are mostly used to express awe or zealous dedication which doesn't really makes projection from the reader in any of them very easy. I still give it 4 stars because I enjoyed it overall. Would recommend for your executive time ;)
Legend is back - best holiday gift
Reviewed at: Vol. 2 Chapter 12
First of all my English is not my native language, so there must be inevitable mistakes, sorry! The legend arose from the dead, people you do not know how much I expected this update never lost strength in waiting! For everyone who is in doubt read it, it was the first Royal Road novel I followed and the first of my favorites.
Great Dungeon Story!
Reviewed at: Chapter 33: Competition Start!
I DECLARE THIS 1 OF MY ALL-TIME FAVORITE AND CLASSIC DUNGEON STORIES!!!
Great story progression! Not too OP, Not too powerful in the begining and you get a gradually clearer picture of the world and characters of influence around the dungeon MC!
Very progressive and imersive MC, monster, adventurer and story growth! Both in terms of action and character growth!
CANNOT WAIT UNTIL THE NEXT CHAPTER!!
Nice and steady
I really like this story the author takes his time makeing each chapter craftign the narrative. i would be interested in the flashbacks of the forge emporer as he reflects on the memories that shaped him into the craftsman he is today