The death of an old dwarf, the reincarnation of an old soul into a dungeon. He was expecting a peacefull, lonely death, and now he is a dungeon. Well, it could be worse, after all, dwarves are at home underground. Now he has to re-discover how to survive in this new life. He and his creations must carve out their place in the world with their own hands.
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This story is a fun read and the author really knows how to bring the enviroment to life and give beautiful detail to how the dungeon is built and how character interact and grow. The only real flaw, and one that really bothers me, is that while i don't mind so much if it gets updated once a month I do mind that there isn't enough there to enjoy in each chapter. Its like getting the most delicious food you can at a restraurant, but it only comes out one bite at a time every six hours. Please, if you can only really stick to once a month try to write more! Otherwise i totally suggest this story to anyone who is interested in LitRPG!
So does that mean you will be uploading once a week?
The story is about Smit a skilled dwarven blacksmith. He considers himself to be the best of the best and then he dies of old age. He died under his mountain alone but not entirely. Smit was reborn and became the heart of a dungeon. Now reborn with a mind of an artist and a new sense of purpose Smit creates a dungeon so beautiful it makes the hallways of a king in the dust. But, beauty is not the only thing that stands out of his dungeon. Elaborate traps, well designed monsters, miles and miles of mazes. To witness his art adventurers must first prove themselves worthy, that is through his dungeon.
The author doesn't lean much on gore and killing. No sex tag but it does have some profanities here and there. The dungeon doesn't kill everything that comes inside. The main character doesn't go full "Boxxy T. Morningwood" on adventurers. Smit rarely kills adventurers even. Smit wants to show the world what he has made, something like that.
If you prefer main characters who are op and go on killing sprees and plays the dominant/alpha role still this is a good book to read. Give this book a chance this is one of the best books here. Grammar is great, there are some spelling mistakes, double words but still readable. World building is great. The style is unique in its own way I suppose. The author is generous on character development explains why he doesn't kill much. The flow of the story on the other hand I will leave it to the readers to decide.
So the main reason I wrote this is because whenever I read this story I immediately think, 'man it would be nice if I had something to base how this dungeon might look' and I found it. Destiny 2 The leviathan raid and it's scenery can perfectly describe how the dungeon would look. With ornate designs and gold everywhere if you just can't find something to base the dungeon off of I recommend checking it out, sure helped me.
Title: Dungeon Heart
Protagonist: a dungeon core with dwarf common sense. artistic kind of guy.
Setting: Fantasy world with monsters, nobles, magics, etc
Tension Level: Low-Mid
Basic Premise: the dwarf craftsman (presumably the best craftsman) died and reborn as a dungeon core. since he can live again he makes his dungeon as best as he can, by making better looking rooms, traps, monsters.
Chapter Content: how the mc make his dungeon better. like modifying his monsters, making a good level (artistically), teaching his children (mosters), and growing as a dungeon. also about how humans (and other sentient race) react to such a beautiful dungeon.
Personal Opinion: I like it. how the mc makes his dungeon better is interesting. also how others challenge his dungeon is also interesting. I also like that there is not much conflict between the mc and the humans (humans don't view the mc as a dangerous being).
This is a very entertaining read, complete with a fresh perspective and actually intriguing side characters/side stories. It's story is well structured, with the pace feeling comfortable, barring some minor changes in speed. Ultimately, I recommend you read this.
The author does an excellent job in describing his world, his characters, and their actions. It is well presented, with an easy to grasp and easy to enjoy feel.
The story is unique, offering the perspective of dungeon creation from a centuries old dwarven craftsman, which is immensely refreshing. While it's nice to see characters start from scratch with their knowledge, having a character with applicable skills is extremely satisfying, as well as their maturity and wisdom that is avaliable to the character.
Other reviews give this story 5/5 on grammar, but that is both incorrect and unfair to the author. His way of writing is excellent, but his grammar needs noticeable improvement, to that the main reason I haven't completed my reading of this work is my incessant need to provide grammatical fixes per chapter. Many of the errors I come across aren't unique, and are seen frequently throughout the chapters, an example being the author's use of capitalization (lack thereof really). Often you will across names left uncapitalized, in one chapter happening several times for the same name. All in all, the author needs to work on improving his grammar or his proof reading, if not both.
As previously said, the perspective is incredibly refreshing, and the character who we share that perspective with is very enjoyable. While not a masterpiece character, who feels as organic as to make you question reality, he is excellently written to fulfil what he should be, and overall fills his role as the main character well.
The secondary protagonists, MC's unique creations, are as well good characters. They have enough depth to them as to allow you room to make a connection, and to enjoy seeing them mentioned if not giving time to shine.
My complaint, however, is the adventurer group the author has created. While not awful characters, with some redeeming features for a few of them, for the most part they feel excessively bland. The worst offender is the magic user of the group, who despite being given a section of a chapter from their perspective, did not manage to show any personality at all, beyond the most basic level of them being alive. For the others, whatever personality they do have feels very vague, such that it feels as though the author does not have their characters settled.
This store is absolutely lovely. The fact that I love dwarven culture (and the fact that most people favour twenty different shades of elves to dwarves as their MC) makes this story really stand out for me. The bond of a family that was created between the MC and his creations is really heartwarming as well. Even if you don't like Dungeon stories, give this a read for the interesting setting and the charming characters!
As a side note, every time in the story that he begins singing I think of the Tolkien songs sung by Clamavi De Profundis such as the Song of Durin.
Give it a listen as you read!
promising beginning, interesting tweaks and originality in terms of the dungeon design itself. hope to see more of the confused adventurer's musings in the future. tends to be well written with few grammaatical errors and while the writing style isn't my favorite, it does the job well.
Usually dungeon stories are cases of a human from earth reincarnating into one with no reason as to why they somehow remember their past life (or worse, a random God with stupid reasons). Here we have a case where a 730 year old dwarf native of the fantasy world dies and instead of quietly going to the afterlife he possesses an injured dungeon heart which was held in his laboratory. The whole thing flows logically and reads like a real book instead of some horrible fanfic self insert power fantasy.
The dwarf dungeon in question then builds himself a uniquely dwarven dungeon, everything must be masterwork, beautiful, and artistic. The descriptions of the artistry are very pleasing. I don't know where the author will go with this long term, but so far I am very satisified with the story.
It's a fairly typical dungeon-core-making-its-first-dungeon story. That said, it's littered with grammatical errors and randomly shifts POV from first person to third person between paragraphs. There's not a whole lot of originality in this, and the characters don't really follow well from their starting parameters - for instance, a craftsman doesn't end up doing any crafting right after being given the power to craft anything he wants.
It's mostly a decent light read, but the grammatical errors detract enough from it to make me give it a pass. Good luck.