The death of an old dwarf, the reincarnation of an old soul into a dungeon. He was expecting a peacefull, lonely death, and now he is a dungeon. Well, it could be worse, after all, dwarves are at home underground. Now he has to re-discover how to survive in this new life. He and his creations must carve out their place in the world with their own hands.
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Don't know what happened to chapters 5 through 15. The overall concept I like and would enjoy reading in its entirety.
Unlike other dungeon core books this is a dwarf are individual that is already a part of the pre-existing world understands the mechanics to a degree and is utilizing previous life skills to create something magnificent from what I have read.
This is an interesting story, handicapped by an apparent lack of proofreading and a couple of stylistic choices, both things that it can hopefully grow out of as the author grows more experienced.
Most of the grammer problems aren't too egregious, but they are noticable and pull me out of the story each time I notice one. Most concerning are mistakes of the type "[description] name [the same description]", since that is the sort of thing that ought to be easy to notice on even a quick glance through before posting. They are thankfully rare, but I have noticed more than one. The biggest problem it actually midway between a grammatical and a stylistic one. The POV sections waver between 1st and 3rd person, even within the same section.
In general, 1st preson perspective is hard to do well, and easy to do poorly, so the fact that I'm not simply listing the use of it as a problem is a good thing. However, in this case, the author would probably be better off sticking with 3rd person close since each of the many POVs ought to have a different tone if they are to be properly done in 1st person which multiplies the difficulty.
All that being said, I intend to keep reading to find out what happens with these characters and more about the setting.
I hope this story continues. It had believable characters and plots. I don't recall many errors or typos. The dungeon system was well thought out.
This novel has fun growth and is a great intro into the dungeon core genre. It has a good plot and unique characters, the plot seems to progress naturally and the MC's power progresssion is explained in a reaosnable manner. The creature creation is fun to see.
Though I can say I have not yet finished the story it is an interesting concept as a whole. There are some minor grammar flaws but they are not too bad and the few of them are in the early chapters. It gets better as you go one and it has some lovely characters like Echo and Pala.
I look forward to seeing what the dungeon will do as it goes forward faced with many who seek to chapter it for there own ends.
First off, this is a good story. It handles dungeon core mechanics and tropes well, and never feels boring or overdone. The MC and his monsters are likable and fun to read about.
The only major issue is the grammar. I don't normally care about grammar. I suck at it, and I can look past the occasional error. This is not occasional. The author desperately needs an editor.
Fight scenes in particular suffer from constant tense changes. From past to present, back to past, in one paragraph. Misspellings are less prevalent, but still appear quite often.
If you can look past the grammar, and the occasional long winded description, the story is great.
I hope whatever RL issues caused this story to stall get resolved. It would be awesome to see more of this great work.
The Characters are well done. My issues are with the grammar and lack of proofreading all detract from a really excellent story. My last point is that I hope to see this story completed. At the time of my review over 11 months have passed since any updates have been made.
I'm enjoying the story, though Smit annoys me spmetimes. Well written and each character sounds like they have their own voice.
I found this story a while ago before making an account after several recommendations for Dungeons related stories.
Having read it up to the newest chapter I can safely say that the recommendations were right and that the author has crafted and is still crafting a wonderful world with many adventures and many more exciting landscapes and people to write.
Though would there be a point in adding a Dungeon tag to the tag list?