Dungeon Heart

This store is absolutely lovely. The fact that I love dwarven culture (and the fact that most people favour twenty different shades of elves to dwarves as their MC) makes this story really stand out for me. The bond of a family that was created between the MC and his creations is really heartwarming as well. Even if you don't like Dungeon stories, give this a read for the interesting setting and the charming characters!

As a side note, every time in the story that he begins singing I think of the Tolkien songs sung by Clamavi De Profundis such as the Song of Durin.

Give it a listen as you read!

I'm enjoying the story, though Smit annoys me spmetimes. Well written and each character sounds like they have their own voice.

It takes time to appreciate some things. Then there are things that make you take the time to appreciate them, this story is one of those things.  As slow as it might seem to some people, I like it like that, slow, arousing feelings while reading.

Slowness with quality is great. And quality is here people!

Grammer could use some major fixin as there are more and more issues the futhur one goes into the story. For me it ruins the story but I can still read if I just ignore it, but it gets annoying sometimes.

Otherwise, as far as I've read I think it's good so far.

Edit: Well, I guess I'm not reading this anyone judging from the realease dates. If it's going to be like that I'd rather not even..

Reviewed through vol. 2 ch. 10

Score break down: 

Story: 5 ★

Strong world building, richly detailed setting, and a plot that keeps me wanting to know what happens next.

Grammar: 2.5 ★

Please keep in mind that I'm harsh when it comes to scoring grammar. For me, 1★ is unreadable, 3★ is the least I expect of a college educated native speaker, and a lot of professionally published works fail to earn my 5★. -- Heavens, but *I* often fail to reach my 5★ level!

We're getting what feels like the second draft of the story. Having experimented with Speech Recognition writing, I'm seeing a lot of the "sounds like" word choices that I've come to expect from that technology, as well as the odd placements of punctuation that occur when pausing to think through the rest of the phrasing of a sentence (or at least when *I* do that ).

Style: 4.5 ★

I'm seeing the style reflect a blend of Tolkien-heritage world building and anime characterization that's very well executed. The grammar issues bleed over here just enough to interrupt the flow, and to put a few of the descriptions in enough question that I quite give over that last half star.

Character: 4.5 ★

The main characters (and almost all of the secondary ones, too) are all very well developed, allowed to reveal their motivations in their own words and without feeling forced. My only poke is the King – he’s just … too much the beneficent king, especially as he’s introduced, that the descriptions of him come across as a touch juvenile, though they do mature as he gets more narration attention.

I really like the dungeon story, but usually they get repetitive without an actual arc for the story.

I don't know what the author has plan for the novel as a whole, but the theme of a dwarf and all about the asthetics is a good point, a unique perk for this Dungeon novel.

I follow with so much curiosity. 

Thank you for the hours of entertainment...

When I first started reading this, I was a bit detached and uninterested. Then the story gave a somewhat sound for the mc to become a dungeon heart, drawing my interest. I proceeded to be disappointed as I thought the author threw away interesting character traits for no good reason (soul becoming young). I was then mildly surprised to see those same character traits brought back in a feasible way (soul recovering froms damage) but at the same time a bit disappointed at the missed opportunity for a few character traits to be used for character building and likability (700+ year old dwarf stuck to his ways clumsily trying to adapt to a new environment and body). Aside from that I also don't like some of the developments in the story (mc conveniently developing powers right as he needs them and so on so forth). The other main gripe I have is the grammar. I know your working on it and I am patiently waiting. All in all I actually enjoy your writing (which is why I took the time to write a review even though I rarely do) and wish you the best of lick in your endeavors.
Ps: if ella doesn't become the noble in charge of smit I'm gonna start a riot
PPs: forgive my poor writing, I was running on 4 hours when I wrote this and had to deal with auto play video ads murdering my ram in cold blood

Love it 

Unique story

 Unlike the animal loving dungeon that hates intellegent monster and the other dungeon that hates killing i'll leave that to you guys if you know what im talking about 

Keep it up

 I hope whatever RL issues caused this story to stall get resolved.  It would be awesome to see more of this great work.

I started reading and didn't stop until i had read the ''currently 32'' chapters, thanks for an amazing read.. despite the rough day that followed because of the lack of sleep.