Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Harem
Born with an emotionally dampened capacity, Alan Mead has always found human interactions to be difficult, especially as a child. He finds solace in books, in history, and in his own mind. An incident, however, when he was just a ten year old child, changed his outlook on life.

Ten years later, another incident occurs, causing his life to drastically change, far more than Alan would have ever thought possible...
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Decieve
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sigh.....but good luck

No clue why you wanted to revamp it, the first one was really good didnt make it into the top 10 for nothing.

guess the write for yourself and not other people thing won’t work here.

 

 

anyway good luck seems interesting ill still read.

overall you writing style and grammar is always the best ive seen on RR

going to wait a see how this character plays out.

 

Best of luck

The Iron Dragon
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I've liked your style of writing since Re:First Monster.English is my second language and I don't see any problem with your grammar , I'm not a grammar nazi so I don't try to look out for every possible mistake.

 It's very early to completely judge the story/character but so far it has great promise.Considering how the main character is the weakest of the weak  but motivated by vengeance he can literally grow in any direction.

I'm looking forward for more ~

hinth
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Keep up the great work you're doing!

@Decieve

Alzeroth (the author) can do as he wants. I can understand his desire to use all the feedback he's gotten (e.g. The Group's strong critique) and use it immediately to improve his writing by starting a new (yet similar) story from scratch. Remember, it's hard to fix what's broken when the base is faulty so creating something new with a solid foundation may be more advantageous.

 

@author

I really enjoy the type of MC you're trying to create so I am very glad to see you're sticking to a similar psyche for your new story. I'm sure you don't need me to tell you this, but on another note, try not to take critique too personally and merely use any that's given (reviews with constructive criticism, not just "meh, i don't like the MC. he doesn't save enough damsels in distress") as TOOLS to help you improve. 

 

Anyways, enough of me rambling on, keep up the great work! 

 

peep the squek
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i just think that alan is just re:first monster and that calms me at night

love your work. your writing is impeccable. One of the best here. Can rival a novel.  story wise, the pacing is just right to get you hook.  love how you make alan. hate luke. can’t wait to see him die. 

as an avid fan of re: first monster I just think that Alan is just Verath living in a alternate parallel world. A world where his slave didn’t die early and his father is not Navaris. hahahha.  

Kazedono
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One more for the win

As awesome as ever ^_^

 

I can't wait to see what will come next.

psychonautilus
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Liked the first chapters, keep with it. Main character is interesting so far but can't really make that sort of judgement well with only 2 chapters. Still, you have piqued my interest

Lonjest
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Another Great FF from Alzeroth

As you would expect from Alzeroth, this is a really good Story. Read the Prologue so far but just from that alone, this FF is worth reading.

Abyssdarkfire
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liked the original curious to see where this goes

i really liked the original but I am interested to see where this story goes can not wait for more.

89kgman
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Our lord and saviour Falconlord likes this story and gives his blessings

Sandsforever
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 Yet another promise to rewrite that died or whatever I read original