The Three Keys

The Three Keys

by ShellBlu

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... He finds himself lost.

{SPOILER ALERT} REVIEW CONTAINS SPOILERS UPTO CHAPTER 9

Bias 

I know the author, Shellblue, and have read several of his works. I also like his writing style, and the weirdly descriptive and lush prose he has.

Story 

The story and the pacing are all over the place for me. Alex Square, the MC, is... a guy who gets lost in a forest. A powerful goddess finds him and invites him to her home. Like Belle in Beauty in the Beast, he follows, and the setting changes from a forest to the god's home.

Where the plot stops. There are magical beings and artifacts, mysteries and hints of future arcs, but the actual events aren't that good. The lady tempts, he refuses. He uses a magic device, walks into an occupied bath. You know, filler stuff. There are sparring and lunch. Lots of dreams and symbolisms. But the actual plot is lacking.
The interlude, however, shows signs of picking up the pace, and thus I remain hopeful. 

Style

Style is where ShellBlue shines. It's relaxing, slow prose with every action is given due consideration. Alex's narration, to me, reveals a lot about his methodical and detailed nature. This fiction would be great as some sort of an adventurer-explorer in unknown lands writing in a diary, but ShellBlue hasn't gone in that direction so far. It might not be for everybody, but I find it delightful.

Grammar

No mistakes that I could spot. And I spent 20 minutes in one chapter trying to do so. 

Character

The only character that I like so far, unfortunately, is the narrator.

While very descriptive about physical appearances, Alex doesn't make many opinions on anybody's character or even say what he thinks about them. Their dialogues are somewhat cliche, and not all that interesting. There's the mysterious goddess who wants to up sexual tension (but Alex is having none of it), the flirty servant who sleeps naked on his bed (Again, denied), and the girl who he spies on bathing (DENIED FOR THE THIRD TIME). They drop hints, but there's no outright development. Alex himself is Dense McGee in one chapter and suddenly Sherlock in another. Then there are the usual cabal of misfits (literally in one case) with quirky personalities who haven't yet got enough screen time to shine. Usual vague Gods show up (But why? Because they must?), show off and then leave.
 
But still, it's early days, so fingers crossed for now.

Summary

Walking through a forest has a lot going for it. The grammar is impeccable and the style is beautiful, and all Shell needs to do is write more to improve the ongoing plot and the character development. This is a promising fic, and everyone should keep their eye on it.