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WILL NOT BE EDITED, WILL NOT bE PROOFREAD, WILL NOT BE THOUGHT ABOUT.

A story about how I can't write at all.
Please don't expect anything
Just turn around and leave
Right now...
Thanks...
:==;

 

 

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Two3Delta
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I'M IN ABSOLUTE LOVE WITH THIS!

Overall: 5 Stars. I love it. It's only Chapter 0 and I'm already in love with it. 

Style: 5 Stars. I've always liked 1st person stories, and I like the way you wrote your's, to where it's not overly descriptive, but still has just the right amount of description to pull someone in.

Story: 5 Stars. Although it's only Chapter 0 so not much has happened, I still feel drawn in to what you've wrote. You are making me addicted like a person is addicted to drugs, I can't wait for more.

Grammar: 5 Stars. Much like Alverost said, since this won't be edited or proofread, I can't say much about the grammar. This can be completely overlooked considering how great the Style and Story are.

Character: 5 Stars. I'm absolutely in love with the character, as she reminds me of myself. Clueless and helpless basically defines me. I can't wait to see her 100+ chapters from now that I'm sure we'll reach with how fantastic this is. 

Final Words: THIS IS ABSOLUTELY FANTASTIC AND I LOVE YOU AURORA~CHAN~! - The Kitten <3

Alverost
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So the first of all lets talk about the style of the story. Its not the usual descriptive style of story but instead follows a 1st person sort. Its suppose to be funny and something you can just spend time reading. Thats what happen even though its only 1 chapter I want to read more cause I'm curious whats going to happen. 

Story wise its more unique than most, it's creative on the author's part and the story so far is quite undevelop but I can't wait to see how the story unfold in such a world.

Now the grammar, not much can be said because if you look on the synopsis it tells you directly that the author did not proofread and isn't going to. This can easily be overlooked due to the style of the story.

The character, its only chapter 0 but I just love the personality of the character so far. She is clueless and helpless but its fits and once again its due to the story. Some people might say this is sloppy but everything works because of the story style.

Final words: Its something you can spend time just simply enjoying it. Just read it for the fun of it and see how the author expand her world. 

drizz
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This is literally RRL summed up.

Humor, weaboo shit thingies, barely any thought put in story or character development.

And still, it is somehow nice to read. Astonishing, really.

The grammar and spelling is also surprisingly good (for RRL standards) and considering that the author is german. 

Azeath
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Random, Random, Random - FUN

So far, there is no plot but this can just be due to short early chapters. However the style of the story and the way the story is progressing tells me its more of a slice of life than anything.

The story gives me an idea of how it would develop in term of style and how the story will become. I just genuinely enjoy the personality of the MC, her clueless but innocent ways just makes me want to read more of it. At the same time it's very amusing and funny to read. 

The grammar of the story isn't amazing nor is it perfect however this can be left aside since thats not the important when considering the style of the story. Also the author said it themselve that the story doesn't get a proofread. 

Another thing to consider is the length of each chapter, is quite little with around 500 words each chapter. However, this also helps to keep the story humorous with small comedic situation each short chapter. If anything you can consider it similar to an Omake.