The Good Student

by mooderino

Original ONGOING Adventure Drama Fantasy Romance Magic Male Lead School Life Slice of Life

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Nic Tutt is a good student. He excels at all subjects. But his education serves only one purposeā€”to gain entry into the Ransom School. 

Ransom is the most prestigious school in the country. Its alumni are destined to become the future leaders of Ranvar. Politicians, statesmen and, in some exceptional cases, mages. Only the brightest and the best get into Ransom.

But Nic doesn't care about any of that. He isn't determined to get into Ransom to further his prospects or better his career opportunities. He has another reason to want to enter Ranvar's most famous school.


 

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Timid
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A BIG improvement over his last (published) story

Great to binge read, the early story rockets along. An interesting main character, and substantial problems/mysteries that have to be overcome while the world building is fleshed out. All in a harry potteresque magic academy. If i had to give a score for the early story -  pre chapter 30 - it'd be 4 out of 5. Worthy to be published material.

That being said, now the story is starting to run into problems. The first main confrontation is over, with an ambiguous ending: Think of it as book 1 ending, and book 2 beginning. Only, looks like book 2 is going to be a continuation of the same storyline.

... and frankly, that's a problem.

The main character has lost the mystery/goal that was driving the plot foward, and now we're getting slice of life chapters as they wait for the inevitable plot progression from the fallout. I hate to say it, but it's not very interesting. We needed some additional plot point to drive the story. A rival school, finding a fairy in the back garden, a spreading black ring from the site of the confrontation. A mystery, or an interesting tidbit to open up the world, or drive the character to other destinations.

SPOILER

Just seems like the story is going to trickle out to the demon realm, which hasn't been interesting to date, with the few side character trips to it. And the main character is starting to grate a bit now that he IS the top dog in school. With flippant thoughts about how he isn't even bothering to correct the teacher in class, to show how speshal he is.

Without persecution, and when he's top dog he's kind of a dick.

Early story was so good that it'd be a real shame, if this work kind of slouched it's way to the same fanfic quality of his other published work. At the moment the only standout character is the librarian, who I'm not even sure if she has a name? The friends group kind of just blend together. I tried keeping track of them and had no luck.

Doesn't help that the other potentially interesting character is absent from the main group for story purposes.

Ashok
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Depressing fall from great potential to abject disappointment, esp. the author

This is one of those stories that start explosively with all the ingredients for greatness, crafted with details that make it attractive to a wide audience: teasing bits of what promised to be expansive worldbuilding, fun dialogue, a modest protagonist striving to do his best in fresh situations, and unrequited love? What's not to love. The only two minor complaints I had at the start were the one dimensionality of the Ransom students (entitled brats one and all?) and the limp, doormatty passivity of the protagonist.

However, the real test is whether characters and their choices stand the test of time. It's extremely difficult to maintain a plot trajectory that pieces together a coherent, interesting narrative given a cast of characters with distinctly different agendas (think about the scene where Nic goes "Miss Delcroix" - sublime). However, in recent chapters, many characters and events have lost this sense of continuity and spontaneity where you internally go "wow! that's so unexpected but I can see how things built up to this" or "huh, I really want to see how their dialogue here affects things later."

I won't bother with every case so I'll focus on one: the inconsistency with Dizzy's dynamic with Nic. One chapter, she suddenly decides to visit bedridden Nic, presumably throughout the night (besides why? this scene was a major anticlimax, regrettably removing a lot of the mystery and anticipation that was previously instilled in readers wondering how they'd reunite-and hey look Simole found out again). Then the next chapter, she's cold with him and Nic's response suggests he mysteriously had rapid short term memory loss of her visit and warmth the night before. A bit later you have Nic's outburst which is uncharacteristic of his portrayal so far and needlessly melodramatic. Characters are acting unnaturally, mostly because there's insufficient development and fleshing out to adapt these rapid jumps and partly because the pacing is much faster in the past few chapters.

But that is not an appropriate reason for the 1/2 star review and never should be. It's quite likely mooderino will recover because he's an excellent writer. No, he lost a reader and loyal voter today because of his contemptuous treatment of my critical comments, going so far as to censor/delete them because he saw it as "rude and hostile." I leave my comments below because there's no freedom in the comment section. I believe everything was constructively oriented, but I may be biased so I leave them here for posterity. I only have one excerpt from mooderino's 1st reply.

MOODERINO'S REPLY #1:

It's jarring because it wasn't mentioned before. It was mentioned before. Oh yes, but still, it's jarring because I don't think he would have mentioned it.!!!!!?????

I know when you have a feeling something's off it's hard to change it retrospectively, but you made the mistake, not me. When that happens so clearly, it's churlish to go 'okay, but still...' and exasperating to deal with even if you're trying to be genuine in your criticism.

CENSORED COMMENT #1 TO ABOVE:

If it's a spoiler thing, then okay. But the way Nic's reticence in the previous chapter was written did not read in any way as purposeful misleading. That's what I wanted to point out. He could definitely feel guilty about not sharing everything when he had the chance, but as I said above, there's not much basis for feeling so guilty for not sharing all his vague suspicions when he had no reason to suspect his friends were relevant to his 'accident'.

I don't think any of my points are just a matter of taste. I'm only pointing out any little details that potentially break the story's consistency or fluidity.

Also, I didn't say I don't like the jokes; they're quite funny in the right situation. I was just remarking that upping its frequency may reduce its kick.

On point 2, that's valid. Regardless, it still presupposes their ability to read through a *roomful* of books posthaste and find the needle. It's possible but it's nearing one extreme of suspension of disbelief.

On point 5, your sarcasm notwithstanding, I'm not being churlish: the point still stands. As I said above, it's a very sudden jump from telling about their history to Nic sharing his deepest desires that even he's barely aware of. For the reader who isn't aware of what exactly "history" entails, it's a disorienting jump from Nic's friendship with Dizzy to Nic sharing that he's in love with Dizzy. Again, I expect Davo is good at reading into these situations, but there's a missing link in the causal chain from a storytelling POV. It's not about what I think or what you think. The context of a criticism changing does not suddenly make it invalid.

I know you must deal with entitled critics all the time, but there's no need to be patronizing. Everything I've written, I've given tenable support for.

CENSORED COMMENT #2:

That's because they were good points that you didn't address (the only thing you directly addressed was Nic's ambitious plan) and instead chose to disparage without expending the same effort to explain or refute.

I only agreed with one of your points, and partially at that. I don't know about you, but I've found it is quite normal to partially agree but still find faults in something.

And oh yes, I can tell you think it's all incredibly obnoxious. But I'm not here to criticize for criticism's sake or even being pushy. These are just the type of things that any professional editor will bother to point out (I know because I've been there) because an author usually can't maintain the same distance to spot. I only bothered with this at all because I think the story's been great and I only wanted to see it excel.

If you don't want to see these types of comments, then just leave a note on the bottom of each chapter to the effect of "I know best, don't question me."

CENSORED COMMENT #3:

I can see how tiring it must be to respond to all these walls of text and acknowledge that it's not feasible to address everything. But I hope you recognize that when people bring up the same points, it's not a coincidence, but a pattern.

For instance, it's not always about answers coming in the forseeable future, but how the build-up to those answers are qualified in the present.

Overall, there was a clear decline in quality in this chapter and readers like Sir Fury and I just wrote to let you know. Though if you don't read it (especially when it's well formulated), you can't be snooty about it *taps finger to temple*.

 

Thank you to mods for recovering my comments.

Andross Guile
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Starts strong but is disappointing

The characters are by far the best thing in this story. One understands where they're coming from and if they're human they act like it. There is of course a shounen character but he's still a teenager and thus flawed like one. 

The reason why I'm giving a review is to warn people. The first 30 chapters (basicall 2/3 of book 1) are great. I'd have paid good money to buy an ebook like that, however the story starts to meander and attempts to be high brow, extremely clever and philosophical. It might be the latter but nothing else. If one wants to be clever one should do it subtly. It wasn't badly writte per se, it merely detracted from the story and in my opinion was a smelling pile of shit. 

So to the author, "Next time, don't try to be Tolkien. Maybe try a Sanderson." 

Oh, and the magic sucks but that I admit can be debated.

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Phenomenal Writing

MC of this story is pretty similar to the one in another work by the same author, minus the cynicism. If you are familiar with the author and don't like his other pieces, don't let it dissuade you from reading this one. This is a planned story and it shows in both the pacing and the quality. Here are some reasons why you should give this story a shot.

1. Beautfiful Prose. It's difficult to describe in a short paragraph just how good the writing is in this story, easily on par with major published works. The author is obviously well practiced in the tools of his trade.

2. Stellar world building. You won't find any info dump chapters in this story. Lore and information about the setting are revealed gradually and meshed naturally with the plot. 

3. Consistent characters with relateable motivations in a believable universe. Secretly OP broody MC that reveals his powers to put the beatdown on TOTAL JERKS (TM) while chicks fall all over him? None of that here. Another cheap plot hook I see in these types of stories is authors having the story *** on their characters for the sake of cheap drama. Orphan who had his entire village slaughtered by evil overlord? *yawn*. This story completely avoids this trope. MC has a fairly stable home life, the lords of the land aren't raging assholes (any more than you'd expect), and society allows for some merit based upward mobility in a pseudo-feudal system.

4. Natural and well paced progression. What do I mean by this? One of the major hooks in this story is the "magic" system. So far the reader only has enough information to make inferences, but it seems like it building up to be something science based. While birth is one way to access it, the "mages" in this story seem to be selected by academic ability. Our MC isn't slinging fireballs straight out of the prologue and there is every indication that he will have to earn his way through the plot. No mysterious old man with cheat training, no heavenly fruits, no genetic lottery, no xian xia bullshit(cultivation is a plague on fiction. BATTLE GOD ULTIMATE DRAGON JOHN CENA), just a normal base human with brains and a good work ethic.

5. Well excectuted ?sort-of-romance? I cannot begin to describe how tired I am of cringy, self-aggrandizing MC/pseudo SI's who think they are god's gift to women spouting their juvenile insecurities and obviously incomplete understanding of basic human nature. Just when I was about to abandon all hope and fling my keyboard through the window, Mooderino arrived to save the day with his beautiful story. Again, I will fall back to point #3, every interaction in this story is, above all else, BELIEVABLE and CONSISTENT with the characters and backgrounds.

I can go on and on about how great the execution of this story is and how many greating writing techniques the author is using, but I'll stop here. If you are looking for curbstomp MC's with the depth of a puddle on a sunny day plowing his way through a cardboard setting, then there are hundreds of other "works" on this site. If you want excellent prose, beautiful world building, and well developed characters, you won't regret reading this story. 

edit: my saltiness at some of the stuff I have been reading has reached critical levels and erupted all over this review. That aside, read this story, seriously. This is the gem that makes trawling through all the garbage worth it.

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I am two chapters in and am unfortunately hooked on a once a week upload speed. The MC is a bit of a mystery, but it is great to see that he isn't just jumping into cultivation or some garbadge. Tons of attention to detail too. Here's to hoping for 2 releases a week!

nenoman
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This one needs to be published.

The characters are intriguing; the world-building is immersive and free of heavy-handed exposition dumps; and the humor is refreshingly subtle. Arguably the most polished work I've read in RR. Keep churning out dem chapters. 

 

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A good student. Five chapters in and I'm already hooked. The author's other stories are really good and I recommend you try them if you're fine with a story SANS OP. But this one I'm afraid is something I beg you to try. As long as you can get past the LACK of ooh's and wow's magic and action, I believe you will find it a good snack you won't regret trying. This story gave me what I missed in stories since a long time, the feeling I used to get before sci-fi,fantasy or lit-rpg were a-thing(I love these genres mind you) thank you mooderino. (P.S. I might have become a little emo and inflated this story a little too much(?) But its my honest feelings and I want to see this story reach the top.

HoloSol
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Glacial Pacing. Dropped at Chapter 40

Gave up after reaching Chapter 40. The story had so much potential...

 

There are other reviews far more detailed than mine, so I won’t go into too much detail. This Web Fiction is a flop because of its glacial pacing and boring characters. I get why the main character makes the decisions he does, but he is extremely boring. The other characters suffer by proxy. There is hardly any depth to the magic system; actually, scratch that, there is NO depth because the main character has no motivation to learn magic. However, we do get to read countless pages on historical figures, battles, and papers through the main character’s perspective. This ties into the pacing problems.

 

However, the writing itself is fantastic. Absolutely phenomenal. I would argue it is in the running for having the best prose on RoyalRoad. I love how he author synthesizes sentences and the flow of ideas from paragraph to paragraph. The author can be very witty in places as well.

 

I’m writing this review because I’m  so sad and frustrated that a story with this much potential falls so flat. World building is great and all, but characters and the actual story matter more. 

NZPIEFACE
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Toxic relationships are toxic

So, I can't actually bring myself to say I dislike this story, or the characters in it, but rather I hate the relationships that some of them have.

Mainly, Delcroix is a massive ass to Nic and their relationship is toxic to say the very least.

 

I found it rather revolting how Nic getting together with her was framed as a good thing. Like Ashok says in his review, Nic is a bloody doormat when it comes to his crush and...

Eh, guess I just wanna say I'm a Simone fan.

Read up to chapter 37.

AiToHeiwa
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Buying When Published.

The first paragraph might come off as a little more like a rant than a review as it brings up the RoyalRoad community, skip it if it gets on your nerves. Bad grammar? Sorry.

TL;DR: A scary/uncomfortable amount of Readers on RoyalRoad can be cringy and biased. (don't hate on me please ~ I'm fragile.) 

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I cannot believe how people are sometimes. RoyalRoad is one of my favorite websites to read fictions of my preferred genres - Fantasy, being one of the most prevalent ones, as an example. Simultaneously, RoyalRoad has, IMO, one of the most biased reader communities out there. Most of the times the reason is clear, they want to see a certain scenario or concept happen in the fiction they are reading. Because of the overwhelming amount of similar styled series hosted on RoyalRoad they have developed a standard. in other words, an expectation - and they cannot receive anything else which detracts from their expectation properly because it's all they are familiar with. They want this and that in the fiction they read, but get This. (a true beauty) To elaborate using a specific example - A Majority (or at least an amount that I am uncomfortable with) of commenters and reviewers want a series where the main gets OP with a fast pace. They seem to hate the "slow-paced" progression and development in fictions that have more to do with the characters themselves towards their environment and prefer development in the form of combat strength and badassery, and introducing those elements fairly quickly (not saying that these styles aren't entertaining, but they leave no room for other styles. Lynching fictions that don't suit their taste in structure, despite the fiction being actually incredible on its own.) I know that in saying this I also am being biased and may not have been on RoyalRoad as long as others have, but I cannot deny seeing it. It could also be said that this is also the fault of the system and trend RoyalRoad runs on - A particularly paced series like this one, and having to wait for chapters weekly will inevitably earn the ire of those of a certain age group (not listing any numbers now) who live vicariously. They just want to see what they want when they want it, assuming an excessively negative attitude once something puts them off. Pacing (the speed of development or progression in the story), the readers' patience, and the number of chapters released at the time are major influences of the rating in fictions of this style on RoyalRoad (Pacing is significant to me because, unless it's inconsistent with the particular fiction, it should not be a problem. It should be seen as, and most of the time is, just the style of the author or setting of the fiction. People need to stick for longer (be more Patient) before giving a prematurely dismissing a fiction on RoyalRoad, narrowing their opportunities for a good time.

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Now for the story itself, I can only sing praises for. I could try to relate to what some people have said - that the story progresses excessively slowly, but I can't because it has the pace that I have no qualms with and is greatly executed. It is interesting all the way through. The interactions and worldbuilding descriptions flow well and do wonders for the overall depth of the story. I don't very much make descriptive reviews because reviews are inextricably built upon an opinion and do influence the perception of those who read them- making them hold expectations, which is a no-no. If you enjoy character interactions and character developments then you will enjoy this fiction.

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Sorry If I don't make any sense overall. And No I wasn't saying that other series were generic by saying they were similar. In fact, I wouldn't even mind anything as long as it is interesting. Most, if not All, hate is actually opinion if you look deep enough. To make an analogy, hating on fictions is really just like racism.

P.S. Your other fiction, "HTADOADB" deserves a higher place. It is unfair that because of some unreasonable ratings, its labeled value plummets. I Agree with you Moody. I read up to the 200th trying to see what people were complaining about, turns out they were just jumping to conclusions and prematurely writing the series off for what they assumed. Your stories are wonderful, ILY, and thank you for making them.