Shepherd Moon, 2nd Edition

by Bobbi-C

Original COMPLETED Action Adventure Sci-fi Female Lead Gender Bender Male Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Sexual Content

Think of a future Earth, where the long-dreaded nuclear war has come and gone, and the global population was knocked down to the level of the nineteen hundreds, but fully recovered and again prosperous, with the human race starting to explore the galaxy.

But when the humans get the inevitable proof that there was indeed other intelligent life, what if these aliens weren't terribly different from the humans, and what if these people were on the brink of war themselves...

- with a nod to the masters of space opera: J. Michael Straczynski, Larry Niven, David Brinn, E.E. (Doc) Smith, Iain M. Banks, and, of course, George Lucas.

My thanks. And my apologies.

 

Note: The graphics here are collages of publicly-accessible material. No I.P. infringements are intended.

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Archyonx
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Good Sci-Fi, but too much irregularities

(based on until chapter 20)
The author put a lot of thoughs in building this story and its world, and it can be seen.

  • Grammar : nothing to say, one or two typo here and here, but chapters are globally fine. Well writen paragraph and good flow.
  • Story : a nice "first contact" sci-fi and complications happening arround it.
  • Character : not beeing 2D cardboard, the characters trait still feel too forced, and their interactions too. Especially their interactions.
  • Style : the flow is generaly good, world building is great and progressive but is sometime contradicting itself.

 

It's a good sci-fi story overall, but some parts of it can be quite hard/annoying to read : [spoiler]

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 After Mr Perfect MC (all of his friends are also very important people) - for the dubious reason of not ofending the Aliens race that have a matriarchal culture in a Federation of differents alien races (and so, differents cultures) - get offered a sex change and accept on the spot, and became Miss Perfect MC, author write us half a chapter (long chapter) some months after operation, on about how the MC cry on feeling different and insecure withs doubts, but still found him, or herself very attractive, like a little, full of worry teenager girl. Multiple times. And for a human culture were sexism is said, thing of the past, it doesn't feel that way at all.

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 MC, who is also a military veteran, taking charge of captain on a spaceship, act like a full fledged civilian, relegating the actual captain to a grunt position (without really troubles) talk and act with the soldiers like with best friends, or nice little kids.

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 When the ambassadors arrive on earth for the first time (some of them royalty of their race) without their own guards, they are flooded by earthlings wanting to touch them, feel them, like if they were rare pet, without any reactions from anyone (not even earthling guards) to stop that or keep the people at bay.

And unfortunatly for me, the author fail to respect the most important rule at story creation : "It's OK to not beeing real,  but it HAVE TO be believable"

Still kudo at the author for getting so many content out regulary :)

cage1996
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long distance relationship

OK going say spoilers right now so be warned.

I read up to ch 6 and yea its good but not my type story I give my reasons later but first I explain why my scores are so different

Grammar score 5 because everything flows just right as far as I been able to see with spelling and the rest

story score 4 because the concept and the point view that it has

Style score got a 3 as not my cup of tea at all to much jumping around way to fast and time skips that are plain annoying the way they just land wham bang thank you mam style

character score go 2.5 simple reason the characters seem hollow at the moment (just my view)

now I gave this a 3.5 as a lot people will like this story even with its short comings and hell it may just be set up a boring thing but story may be great later so gave it decent score. l personal like idea of world coming together for greater good but it was never explained how the f did satellite survive or how brutal the war was if 95% world pop died due to war there no way in hell any satellites survived that can man crew so yea that tick me off. But all in all a lot people like it so thought a review was needed as it deserves more from different points of view

TheRWS96
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(read till chap 20)
Like I said in the title I love it

I love the story

love the characters

and like the battles

 

But and this is more of a pet peeve of me I suppose I just can’t shake the feeling that the technological levels are totally off and the direction they are going in is not logical. 

something which would solve this problem for the earther side at least is the starting of a long overdue Dyson swarm around the Sun to power passive black hole generating stations (Why black holes? well you can use them as battery’s if you make them this way :) )

a final thing for the author and all who are interested in Science futurism go watch the YouTube channel of Isaac Arthur: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCZFipeZtQM5CKUjx6grh54g?&ab_channel=IsaacArthur there are lots of interesting and realistic futuristic concepts, structures and ideas there.

to the author thank you for writing and I really want a lot more :)

Sephereen
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Extremely well written Sci fy novel

If I had to classify this Novel, I'd say it is a mix of first-contact, hard sci-fy and a large amount of inter-social and political discurs. You have to really read this story and remember all the interconnections between various races to understand all that is happening on the first read-through.

The second edition is a masterfully written example of an advanced Sci-Fy Novel, way beyond some of the literature available in the bookstore.

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Hidden gem for Sci-Fi fans, takes a time to reach it thou

This story is one of the few hidden gems, take a time to reach the better parts of the story, involves reading and understand quite a lot but is really good (probably all Sci-Fi stories involving that)

Characters are good, just that they dont seem to be alive but otherwise they are good

Style, it could be worse, it could be better, but its a style that good enough for me to be hooked

story score: hmm, hard to say..... the concept and how its being written are awesome yet somehow they dont fit to be perfect, but alas 4.5 stars for that

grammar: I aint a grammar nazzie, i hardly find faults, might had found a fault here n there but they usually skip my radar which isn't good at all =) OLD TECH RADAR!

 

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I feel that the story is a very interesting piece that really captures both your imagination and your attention.

Constantly making you want to read the next chapter, wondering how the story will progress, wanting to know what solutions our protangonist and friends will make, and what other amsing stituations they will find themselves in.

At the beginning i felt that the protangonist lacked any form of individuality beyond the vague "here's the main character their amazing, deal with it", but after a time they finally became a unique character that i could enjoy reading about. 

The same could be said for the other characters, they all in the end get fleshed out and become more than just bare bones side characters.

In the end if you want to enjoy the story you need to keep an open mind and seek out the next plot developement yourself whilst reading, this will allow you to properly enjoy what is a very well written piece about some very interesting people and the universe that the author has put together.

Don't let your pet peeves get to you for once and enjoy a story which does have a personality and even has an author/editor/proofreader with a sense for grammer.

Saphyron
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This is a really good story well made with a lot of lore behind it. The author makes believeble char's(most of the time).

But the story simply drags out too much and I become bored of reading it.

I will give it a good score because it is a good story. But I will no longer read it.
Good luck author.

antioch75
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Excellent story, it has a good balance and doesn't get really technical

I am seriously enjoying this story. It is already one that I would enjoy purchasing, even though it is free on RRL.   

The author really deserves kudos for writing a good sci-fi that stays out of the too thecnical, while still giving the reader enough to grasp what the author is trying to convey imho.  

The character development is top notch, none of the main characters come off as cardboard cut outs, at least to me. Even the villians are given life and at least some backstory.