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Peter V. Kastell is taken from the cycle of reincarnation and given a purpose.
His purpose can be fulfilled in nearly any way he chooses.

BUT

His soul is damaged. And because of that, he will be disadvantaged in an unforeseen way.
Thanks to a benevolent Goddess he will gain different advantages to compensate.

Along the way, his story will be uncovered, and he will gain powers beyond what he ever thought possible.

A unique Lit-RPG series.

Is mana really all that important anyway???



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herolaubet
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Interesting plot and setting. Side characters that actually add something interesting. Text flows very well and is well written.

My first review here, and I couldn't be more happy with the novel. Recommended to anyone who likes LitRPG novels.

Jazehiah
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I am not a huge fan of LitRPGs, but the author does a good job incorporating the System and has avoided the trap of massive information dumps, instead spacing them out into manageable (if a little large) chunks.

The characters and their motives are believable, including the "big bad" of the world they live in. The main character lives in relative seclusion from the world, but doesn't exist in a vaccume from other characters. Character interactions drive the plot.

There is the promise of an overpowered main character, which may be a turn-off for some, but the author (seems to) have a good reason for it.

Spoiler: possible spoiler

Overall, it shows promise, and I'd like to see where the story leads.

Lone
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Style. Longish chapters, lots of colours. I find some of the tables to be a bit hard to read, as the colour of the text in them conflicts with the table colour sometimes. It is also a little bit complicated at some points so you might not wanna read this if you're a skimmer as all the little details seem to matter.

Story. Really started growing on me, I can see why someone would like it.

Grammar. Well, the author has aimbot on for this (Grammarly) so it's bound to be good at least to some degree.

Characters: I feel like there was a bit of background info dumping, but the characters themselves seem fine.

All in all, I feel that this is a sink or swim novel, give it a try at least, read the whole thing before you judge it as he does improve the more chapters he releases.

BradKingLida
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You have a good start, but that's it.
What you have currently does not deserve to be rated above the other works on here that are hundreds of chapters long and are great in quality.

EDIT: discontinued works get .5 stars from me.

Harshbrowns
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 This is a story that relies on video game screens and info dumps to support itself instead of good writing. If I wanted to read about video game mechanics I'd go to MMO-Champion.

Remember folks, don't use video game mechanics without a solid reason to do so. If you do use them, use them as sparingly as possible, and have an actual legitimate reason other than you wanting to subsitute actual writing. I'll still vote you as low as I can for doing it if you use them.

It's best for new writers to avoid using terrible crutches like this.

JackStiles
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Wasn't expecting a good story and was still disappointed

Main character is too smart, too good, too strong. Ideal mary sue with no flaws besides a thirst for violence and personality issues. Having odd personality quirks that seem tacked on and forced because he is too perfect. This so called avatar of justice at one point gets bumped by a fellow jogger, in turn gets revenge by ramming him so hard he bounces across the ground knocked out. Then complains about the others being childish.

 

I can't take this story seriously, the author created an interesting world, a flat villain that could still work but ruined the entire thing with an over powered MC that is growing too fast for any feeling risk as he is over powering people almost 3x his level. Also if you don't enjoy endless menu screens it will b e hard just getting through the prologue.