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Peter V. Kastell is taken from the cycle of reincarnation and given a purpose.
His purpose can be fulfilled in nearly any way he chooses.

BUT

His soul is damaged. And because of that, he will be disadvantaged in an unforeseen way.
Thanks to a benevolent Goddess he will gain different advantages to compensate.

Along the way, his story will be uncovered, and he will gain powers beyond what he ever thought possible.

A unique Lit-RPG series.

Is mana really all that important anyway???



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Interesting concept, I recommend

The whole story is everything but boring. Up till now, (CH 11) the author has created many status screens and most have a unique color. Most authors on this site don't take advantage of the status screens that RRL has on their site. It's one of the things I actually really like about this site. It has amazing potential, with only 10+ chapters released I can't wait for more. 

GoodOldChap
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Interesting plot, but the characters and character interaction seem flat

It's a lot of Character A is mad, Character B is happy instead of genuine feels

It also annoyed me that he scans the elf girl to find out she is an elf and then the next time he scans he can't see any info cause she was wearing a ring that blocked it

did she just randomly forget to wear her ring that one time, seems forced

actually, a good amount of the book seems forced

Jknott
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I was really loving this story. Well written and then i get to the final chapter and the author goes on a rant ending the story. 

EverShadow
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Very Good, but Dropped

While I wouldn't say that it's a huge groundbreaker in the litRPG genre, I found the story to be engaging and fun throughout the telling. I am quite sad that the author dropped it, but I agree that it was a good idea in the end. The stats and numbers did get confusing at times, and I look forward to the possible rewrite.

Afforess
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The Gods Are Idiots Plot

The main plot of the story could be summarized fairly simply. The Gods Are Idiots. There is no other excuse for the sheer number of dues ex machina events that happen early in this story. I'll give the author back a star if the story ends with the MC killing off all the God characters, because honestly that's the only end they deserve. How they've managed to survive so far is something of a miracle.

 

The writing style and prose is pretty advanced, and the characters aren't all one-dimensional, so props due there. I just wish the main plot didn't involve so much dues ex machina and not-so-invisible author's hand.

earthdrake
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Equilibrium reached, let's see how it continues.

Equilibrium is a new twist to the whole lit rpg genre. Not a incredibly original twist but fair enough. Reminds my of "Those who aspire to become gods".

The writing style is nice, well paced and the world building is well mixed to be interesting.
As a minus i would say that because of the genre and the story it required tons of worl and lore building and it's not extremely fun, however is necessary to the story.

As far as grammar this is excellent. Maybe because i read the already proofed and edited chapters but have not found errors nor poor usage of the language.

The story itself is good, not overly creative nor a excellent plot but looks promising.
As far as chapter 16 is just barebones of story. We know that gods are doing powerplays and if all goes well Peter will destabilize the world in favor of Justice, however it will need pretty much a miracle (and tons of plot armor).
There are a few foreshadows (some too notable) however the story is just starting so that's all we have.
As to critic the explanations, the ammounts of lore building and world building that are in this story could be more spaced out or ignored until later (elfs plight, whole blood forest, etc). It is needed but maybe not right now, each chapter you are hit by those "world lore 101" and could be more spaced between each other. It feels like the first volume (until he leaves the temple) is just for the sake or world and lore building.
Also the fight against the spiders feels a bit wrong. He at lv 0 is already strong as someone 21 or so, then gets 8 more levels (well technically 6.5 but still) 27 should be enough for a normal fighter to kill the "spider boss" plus skills and else it shouldn't be surprising.

As far as charaters goes most are ok. The mc is a bit too strongheaded, scatterbrain and one track minded (and that happens with just about most of the mcs) however is not wrong nor feels incongruent with the story. The others are quite expected (old "masters", helpers, betrayers, jealous "perfect guy in school arc") they are not exactly original and are a bit archetypical however they are not bad (well jealous guy is a tad too much).
Also gods could use some love, there is no way that they are that stupid or making things as broken as that system. One thing is going for the 1 in 10.000 event, another is the 1 in 10 trillion (several unexpected errors just for him? either is a conspiracy or there is something wrong there, also taking in place that the "system" is made by them and is by all looks "perfect" how come the EC is so buggy, the reaper ealry released happened, etc).

I will be waiting for the next chapters, this can be an excellent novel with some work.

Lundynne
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Starts out strong, ends up unreadable

"Show don't tell" is a concept that the author does not seem to be familiar with. The story starts out strong, with a lot of potential, but is ruined as soon as speaking characters are introduced. The MC supposedly has a strong soul, and a strong mind, but half the time he behaves like a timid teenager, and the other half of the time like a cocky teenager. The author should try to match the behaviour of the characters with their position, their history, their power, and the traits he claims they have.

Kalistar
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Amazing story and characters

This is an amazing story with characters that actually feel alive and not some emotionless robots that can speak only 3-4 words.

So if you have time,for the love of Adrestia, READ IT !!  You may not belive me,but its that good.

Abaddon34
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Really drags you into the story.

Blitzed my way thru this after discovering it. Thoroughly enjoyable. Good characters, well written and not just concentrating on an OP MC going out and blasting everything that moves. 

Yes the main is OP in physical BUT he is having to slowly learn his abilities and use his intelligence to plan ahead for unknown eventualities. 

Looking forward to continuing to read this. Keep up the good work. Oh, and hurry up with the releases..I want to know what happens^^

 

The Drast
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Beautifully weaved together

The story is simply amazing. The use of LitRPG is simply amazing. I've never seen such an innovative use of litRPG before and im eager for more.

Style score: 5/5

The Author simply has complete grasp on the language and the story seems to flow and never be abrupt. I also think he manages the infodumps well and uses status screen ridiculously well.

Story score: 4/5

As far as what I can see the author is going to weave an amazing story. I docked one point cause the story has just about begun. I'll add the star once the story has progressed far enough.

Grammer score: 4.5/5

Very few mistakes and well done.

Character score: 4/5

The characters maintain enough of their own individual personalities which are distinct enough. However the characters seem to be following a generic path taken by most fictions. Also it doesn't really seem to be an anti-hero protagonist yet.

Overall: 5/5

Amazing to read. I hope the author continues the book.