Life As a Servant

by TheCrow

Original HIATUS Romance Magic School Life Slice of Life
Warning This fiction contains:
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Sometimes...you can cry until there's nothing wet in you. You can scream and curse to where your throat rebels and ruptures. You can pray, all you want, to whatever god you think will listen. And, still, it makes no difference.

This is the story of a sick 19-year-old young man called Bin, who tasted despair ever since he was young. He became numb to the cruelty and unfairness of life yet he still lives, hoping that his little sister will live a life much better than his own. With not much time left to live due to his illness, Bin tries his best to gain some money for his sister before he leaves this godforsaken world.

It all began with a coincidental meeting... two fates intertwined together, one was a poor and dying youngster and the other was a spoiled and childish girl.


This story is only a stress relief and would only post when I'm free, the main focus would be my main story.

WARNING: I'm just writing this for FUN, so whether it has some cliché moments or anything of the sort, Do not blame me for you have been warned.

PS: For some special information, this story does not have much action, so if that is what you are looking for then I suggest you do not read. It has mainly slice of life/ Romance/ Comedy( a bit as I'm still a beginner in that) / Tragedy (not all of it but can be sad at times).

Have a good read if you ever decide to try it out.

Peace

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Gagaga
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m..mo..mOor..MOoORrRrREeEeEeE!!!

Brah, admit it. 

This could get HUGE!

I,as a RoyalRoadLegends resident, demand to make this story, Life As a Servant, to be atleast ur secondary project!

larskan
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Found the story by accident, as someone that usually hates Romance, I went at it as a pessimist, but when I reached the end, I just wanted more.

The characters are very loyal to their personalities, and I can already start to see some slow character development between our two main characters.

Although Romance, the story contains its fair share of Mystery and Behind the Scenes plot, which certainly makes it a very nice read.

If you are looking for a good story, minor supernatural things, some mystery and some budding romance, give the story a try :)

ProfGenki
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This is really good, more please smile

SarcasmInGlasses
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This is one of the greatest stories i have ever read. Overall the character development is great and the idea is amazing. Honestly this book actually made me tear up a bit, it a great story that has a morale behind it. This book reminds me of reality and makes me want to help people out there even more.

This book is definetly on par with your other two books and has a great plot line. Definently a book worthy of the title 'keeps you on the edge of your seat' and honestly this book gives us all a reality check.

I recommend that you keep writing, you make me look forward each day hoping for a new chapter. Keep up the good work and i can't wait to see were this book goes.

darkbro20991
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Primate
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 The Style.

Ominiscient third person narration. Since there are multiple characters, the author is able to project their thoughts, feelings and perspectives to the readers in a good way. 

The Story.

The story is about a sick 19-year-old young man called Bin, who wants to make sure his younger sister, Mina, is comfortable in life before he dies. But he became embroiled with a spoilt rich girl called Jasmine. However, there is a great plot twist regarding the siblings true nature later on. Great story line.

The grammar.

The grammar is actually good. From the little I've read, no major error was discovered that could affect the flow.

The Character.

The characters are well written. They really fitted their designated roles in a good way. The characters' building and interaction are on point.

Good job, author. Keep it up.

 

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The idea behind the book is intriguing but sadly I can not handle the grammer and sentence structure. It was so painful to read just the first 2 chapters. I wish I could have given it a batter chance but, a story needs to be able to draw in the reader with the first few chapters and I feel so disconnected reading it.

Pentinium
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At start we are met with a poor boy with attitude,he and his sister are orphans living in a shaby house in a world with magic.He slips and spills food on a rich girl that later hires him to be his servant. Then we get some bickering and stuff , and when we think that there wont be anything new

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