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Have you ever thought about what is it like to be Eternal? What does being Eternal even mean? Maybe I can show you what it is that you are desiring. What lies at the center of the universe, when you reach the peak of strength and power? Can love reach that place too, or do you lose your feelings the stronger you get?
How long can you travel and hold onto yourself, before feeling that you are starting to fall apart, losing your mind to your strength? How long is your road? Your feelings? What's going to win over you? The Darkness and the Hate? The Love and the Light? Or maybe none? Follow me as I show you my colorful yet gray path to eternity.
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88th Chapter - What Does It Take To Kill?
93rd Chapter - Chasing Rainbows [Loop?]
108th Chapter - The Fall of a Creator?
109th Chapter - A Family [Descendant]
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EDIT: The novel is in rework. The original and the new ones are completely different. Where you see [Edited] it means that I'm done with editing the STORY! Whereas where you don't see it, it's in the old style. For now, I'm editing only the style. Once I'm done with every chapter, I'll run through it once again and correct possible grammatical mistakes. The style will be edited until the 45th chapter.
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Just to clarify what i mean by the title: I imagine for a lot of people their impression of this novel will heavily depend on how much they like/hate the following things:
- (very) op main characters
- main characters are essentially the same person (will get to that)
- a lot of people get brutally "murdered" (fun times)
- the world changes heavily with every new realm they experience
- this novel escalates really quickly (reeeeeeaalllly realllly)
- the 18+ scenes are very intense
I would have given this story a straight 4.5 or 5/5 stars if it would be from just the pure fun i had with it, however it is not really without fault, so i have to restrain my fanboy behaviour somewhat.
TL;DR: Characters are straightforward without being boring. Character developement is somewhat secondary, but is not strictly necessary. Most side characters change often, but the more permanent ones often great. Main characters are op af and have a great relationship.
The characters in this novel are somewhat hard to describe, without giving a false impression so please read this entire section. Most of them are, while not being 100% tropes, very straight forward. They do not have that much mystery to them and act on a few very obvious principles. This does not mean, that they do not act like real people, but rather that most act a bit predictable.
This however is entirely (or seems to me) intentional, as there are a lot of them and they frequently change. It also seems to be in line with how this universe is. By this i mean, that this universe is survival of the fittest, which would naturally result in more straightforward characters driven by a select set of motivations.
Now that is not to say that there is no character developement, although it seems fair to say that there is not that much of it happening either. Which brings us to the main and some of the more permanent side characters.
The main characters (!mild spoiler for first few chapters!) share a mind for all intents and purposes. This means, that they quickly develop a very similar personality (or already have it from the beginning). After a while they are basically the same person and only change a bit in the later chapters. This means you can often predict what they are going to do. However their clear motivation and their relationship are also what makes them so great. I for one like them very much and love, that they each bring their style and neither of them is the weak partner. Also their relationship is just the best and gets transmitted really well (although seems more adressed to the male audience, but meh who cares). Also they are really broken, which again can be a good thing if it is (like in this case) done well (means you have to work harder to get a good story/world).
The side characters are pretty numerous and often rather shallow. This does not go as much for the more permanent ones, although even they are not the most deep characters you will ever see. They are still good and if they go more in the direction it is going to now, it will be even better in the future.
World and Story:
The world is pretty nicely thought out and has a lot to it. The concepts of realms allows for new elements to be introduced every time and makes for the ideal setting for such overpowered characters.
Not much to say here really except that it is pretty nice overall.
The story is similar to the world and characters. It is pretty linear, although it has some unexpected sidetracking going on, which adds to the few mysteries there are. It harbors enough surprises and situation to be interesting, although i would not say it is the deepest story ever.
For later developements: a few pretty drastic and interesting changes happen. For what i mean (not really a spoiler, rahter half a teaser):
Congratulations to the creator (you will see what i mean later and oh boy didnt see that one coming) for getting a soulmate.
Style and Grammar:
The writing style is good overall and the grammar is ok.
The fight scenes are somewhat meh for the beginning dungeon crawling (not all of them) and nice for the overworld fighting. This changes later, as the miniboss and floorboss fights are not that long and the overworld fights also get even better. It is mostly the MCs showing off, but if you enjoy it like i do, then you will not be disappointed with how broken they are. But to be fair there are better novels out there, when it comes to fighting scenes.
The 18+ scenes are really intense and are well written. They are somewhat rediculous, but hey... fun times ;p
The constant math stuff can be a bit meh (with the lifespans and stuff) and i swear the authour has a fetish for big numbers. Same goes for realms and stages, where i sometimes have problems remembering or getting at what level everyone is. It is not a major concern though and is often explained by the author.
Just a suggestion (maybe a bit unnecessary):
Maybe add the realm number after the realm in brackets and have a reminder, aside from the info pages (authors note maybe) of what powerlevel the most important characters are.
To those who are wondering, why i have given 5/5 here, it is simply because of the MC interaction with everyone, which is pretty funny and great in its own way.
All in all the novel is pretty great and if you like this kind of thing then you will have a great time.
SHORT AND TO-THE-POINT REVIEWS ARE FOR THE WEAK
I'm writing this story after i've read about 35 chapters and as such the review might be slightly biased, since I like it :).
As the author stated in his foreword he intended to let the world unfold itself as the characters progressed in the story, which as he noticed himself wasn't ideal. He changed it after a few chapters. From then on the novel improved and went from 2 stars in style to 3 1/2 in my opinion. It's not yet perfect since, as the Herbin noted, things like the "feel" of the environment are missing especially in the biginning and still in later chapter, although is getting more descriptive and colorful.
The grammar was from the beginnning good and improved as the stroy progressed so I don't think I have to write specifically about it.
The story itself is quite engaging, once you read past the beginning(see foreword). You have the dungeons, ou have the conflicts between different sort of cultivators and the mystery of where the heck is the earth in all this and what happened to it. Also, why would true divine beast die, if they are as powerful as the story suggests? I'm excited to learn more about those mysteries.
The biggest problem for the story lies I think in the characters, not because they are bad, but because they are pretty much set in stone. And at times their interactions with the rest of the people get repetitive. From the beginning they are sure of themselves and know what they intend to do. They have their flaws, which is why I still like them, but they are not yet amazing, hence three stars.
All in all a good story, with room for improvement.
The story has a great amount of potential. But the choppy sentence structure and immature MC(borderline idiotic) take away from what could be amazing.
my first review on this site lol
- This is a very nice read as not only the story is written properly with a nice tinge of ero spiciness with good amount of mystery to it too.
- Another thing which i really like is how the author is very good in interacting with the readers and as being his first novel this can also be called as a masterpiece too.
- The pacing in the starting chapters is a little fast but later it becomes ok and in the final chapters too-it can feel a little rushed but its still ok as many things start to unfold at that time.
- I am not very content with the grammer mistakes as sometimes insted of he, she is used....and that kind of mistakes but its still bearable as the more you read into it the more you can understand but still a proofreader for this novel specially in the chapters which still need to be edited would have been nice.
- The crossover between the novels written by this author also happens which i found a little annoying in the start but afterword it became easy to understand so not many complains there.
So this is my review and i am pretty satisfied with this read for its amazing quality in nearly every aspect.And there is also the fact that nearly all the problems that i said above were also discussed by the author too.
Quite a nice tale, indeed. I randomly started reading a story i liked the summary of, and finished in time with the author! Such a nice feeling
Now for the important part of the review!
Characters are quite nicely set, with even the occasional Deus Ex Machina explained in the epilogue, with (in my opinion, of course) too much emphasis with explaining how they are dark inside. Let the characters show their personality! Don't just tell what they are like!
Of course in a story such as this i guess it can be expected, but the "bad guys" are always so plain, without a personality, simply representations of authors' disliked personality traits, and done with immediately, rinse and repeat.
Style of the story? Quite good, but could be better. Pretty much everything is explained, leaving almost nothing for the reader to imagine. Of course i guess for some that is a positive thing, but to each their own.
Now for the thing i think would bother and also probably does bother the most readers. Grammar.
Make no mistake, your usage of grammar check drastically improves the reader experience (without it i would have probably turned around after 5 or so chapters). However, spellchecking does not fix improper word usage, wrong sentence structure, awkward word choices, repeating words et cetera.
I suppose half of it can be forgiven on (hungarian) grounds of english not being your first language as you imply throughout the story. Still. This is something that can be imlroved drastically.
Now, a random thought, from when i grew annoyed with the grammar:
"This novel... it's like i was reading a chinese xianxia story, written by a japanese author, translated to english by a german translator."
Hehehe. Don't take it to heart too much. :)
What can I say? I enjoy the absolute hell out of this story. Characters are well written, each with their own unique foibles and personalities. There's nothing generic about any of the characters, not even side characters.
The story is pretty good as we watch Alice & Hiro grow in strength and find friends and allies all the while murdering shit in their own unique way.
I've got to give a 4* for grammar because reasons :P
Anyway, this is a really good twist on your usual cultivator novel and well worth reading.
Eh. If you've NEVER read a Xiangxia Novel, or at the most, read only one or two, then I can recommend this for you.
I'll be upfront and say I gave up on Chapter and I really don't know of it picks up after it.
It has the typical problems of Xiangxia novels. The MCs have no apparent goal other than something vague like "Be the strongest". Enemy clans are used only as a stepping stone. Psychotic mental problems with the MC and their very lax morality (The MC wanted Earth's laws to protect women and children, but he wanted to kill anyone that bothered him). And, "lol humans/elves/beastmen are so dumb, fighting against each other! We're so much better because we're dragons! Oh look! Some plebian guard from X clan. Let's go kill him!"
The MC also feels quite juvenile. Like screaming "WOW YOUR TITS ARE SO BIG!" to his girlfriend, despite being a reincarnated person AND having inherited "knowledge", not just from his base race as a dragon, but this magic Crystal a city has which conveniently explains the power houses in said city. Granted, knowledge is not wisdom, but I can't identify/relate to an MC like that.
Romance is also "Eh." The two MC's are apparently soulmates and they click, and think so much like each other that they don't bicker and basically feel like they're just one and the same person. Their relationship has no depth. Yes, I know I'm basing this on VERY early chapters, but the way they act makes it like they've know each other for a while when it's the opposite.
Worl building is basically non existent. The MCs don't stay anywhere for too long so there's no real point. Again, at least at the first four chapters.
Also, the author makes excuse that "if you don't understand something, don't worry! It'll be explained soon."
I mean, like why don't you explain it now when it's relevant???
A cliché story... not. We've always been given stories about a young boy/girl defying heavens, going against enemies much stronger than them and somehow surviving(plot armor ofc), reaching the apex of cultivation/magic/martial arts without relying on anyone, doing everything alone.
But this one is unlike those. In this novel we have main characters, who ARE supposed to be at the apex of cultivation, taking their deserved spot among the ranks of cultivators.The top!
They are talented, in fact they are the embodiment of talent itself.
They are strong, but it is not a strenght that comes with plot armor or anything mind you, it is a strenght that is very very natural. Simply because of what they are.
They are arrogant, because they have every right to be. Again, simply because of what they are.
Last but not least they are very, very perverted. Seriously, these two lovebirds will put every nymphomaniac in the world to shame. .....*mumble lucky bastards mumble*
Cough* Cough* Anyway. This is a pretty bloody but at the same time pretty light hearted story of a guy who is reincarnated from earth into another world as a.. something(spoiler so I won't tell) and a girl who is apparently a same something as the guy. They are each others other half, and they realize this rather quick, so they begin and continue their journey together. In fact they are "so much together" that you start wondering how can they not grow tired of each other.
Anyway, for the actual review, I will have to say characters are definitely the weak spot of this story. Both of our main characters are very, very simple and bland. You can predict everything they are going to do and say. And I think this is the result of author wanting to get to the scenes where our main characters can act as badass as possible, as quickly as possible. He simply forgot about the character development at the start of the story.
Untill recently, the story didn't look that promising either. Until author 'twisted' some things. Which in result made every single chapter a cliffhanger. Because of how exciting and interesting they end.
I can't say anything about grammer as I'm not a native speaker but it is easily better than %90 of the novels posted on RRL.
TL;DR: Aside from characters being undeveloped, novel has absolutely nothing to dislike about it. There are no frustrating, unnecessarily prolonged fights or arcs that make you wanna punch your computers screen. Author always manages to satisfy you with the results of things. Definitely give this a try. And don't skip .5 chapters, you'll regret it, hihihihi
Edit: I realized that since around chapter 60, characters have been becoming more and more interesting. With them becoming more interesting, obviously the novel as a whole is much more enjoyable right now. And the best thing is, it's still getting better and better. This guy is one of the few authors who actually grows and learns at a visible rate. You won't believe the same person wrote this whole story when you re-read it once.
review as of chapter 79.1
stop reading this now and read this novel. it is hilarious.
if you really want a review than i'll be honest here, i generally do not like xianxia style novels at all. i much prefer the litrpg approach instead as i find it generally more enjoyable and easy to understand. xianxia is far too overblown, confusing and often takes itself far too seriously. with that said, i was highly entertained by this webnovel and it was a better read than many of the litrpg genre i have read.
as far as action is concerned, there is a good balance. fight scenes can be a bit repetitive but at least there is quite a variety of descriptive terms used to keep us entertained. i cant say i care much for the other action scenes but those are not necessary for the storyline.
while i do think the romance between alice and hiro is quite overblown and excessive, at the same time it is also highly enjoyable and i would not wish to have it any different. their antics as an idiot couple are certainly quite enjoyable and laughable. i particularly like how they panic whenever they are not in close proximity to one another. it makes me think their company is comparable to some sort of addictive drug..
keep up the good work author. i really would hate to see this dropped.
I like it. I really want to like it. But writing (and reading) first-person is hard. I struggled a little to get through the first six chapters and I'm taking a break to write this review.
Style: good pacing & very engaging, casual dialogue. Not a lot of monologues. World building primarily happens through character thought and scene-setting. Unfortunately - it's very flat so far. Not a lot of variation, especially between the POV switches, which makes it difficult to connect with Hiro & Alice.
Story: my favorite part: interesting world-building! I like this framework that is easy to understand and well described. Standard Xianxia stuff of growth being a driving force and plot device to move forward. Time skips over training scenes happened a few times but didn't cause me to disconnect from the plot or the characters.
Grammar: Awkward uses of contractions in speech (everyone talks the same - see character below). Some parts need more polish (I.e., ending a sentence with a contraction: "I think that I'd." Vs. "I think that I would"). Several typos and some misuse of words (they're vs. their vs. there) also need some cleaning. I've read worse on RR, but this is the first story I liked enough to comment on despite some minor flaws. I look forward to reading the later chapters.
Character: The story will be significantly improved if the author can vary the speech patterns and diction of internal monologue between characters. Perhaps this evolves later on (as per author's note) - i plan to keep reading and will update this review when I get a chance. One part that I suggest changing below will greatly help character continuity (spoiler below for a scene in chapter 5). I see your author notes and I look forward to reading your work as your style continues to evolve.
when Wu Shan personally attempts to apprehend the two protagonists and fails, it really breaks the story continuity/doesn't make sense from his ability to control the whole planet & be insightful enough to know where they're going. Personally being outsmarted by an oath at a spaceport is also pretty silly. Changing this to be an immature lackey (or son?) of Wu Shan would make it a lot more believable.