The Son Of Chaos

The Son Of Chaos

by NinjaPup

Cero,formally known as Jake was an average orphan college student on Earth.Well that was before the world got a notification of its destruction.Jake woke up to find himself in a white room and infront of him was an entity without shape or mass the first thing it said was"Hey son,so i destroyed your planet cause i missed you even though you dont know im your real dad"

 

sup guys im the author and i have no idea how to write a story im just doing this cause i want to tell me your thoughts on it lool

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I would suggest spell check, a proof reader, and more fleshing out of the world and characters. Right now it's just "this guy did this, this happened.. etc." Maybe make the MC a little less naive too.